love it, its bta than the first chapter. i like the way it seems to be goin, keep up the gd work

like it, uv kinda started it off wher the bk finished romance wise, its not like outa the blue haryy has somehow discovered his feelings for hermione in paragraph one and by paragraph three theyre married. too many of the fics are like that i like this one

I hope you haven't forgotten about this story. I love the others just as much and Im sure its hard to write so many but I'm like your #1 fan. Please dont forget about this story

I love your stories. This isn't the only story of yours I'm reading. I'm desperate for updates. Keep up the good writing.

First I'd like to start off by saying Happy New Year! I'm enjoying your story very much and can't wait to read a new installment. I love the balance between action and romance and the very believeable problems.

oh...niiice...i liked the part where he screamed :i love hermione granger" romantic he didnt care if someone heard him...

finally...you always start with some unkown feeling...here is with friendship...he is willing to protect her...aw....good work

wow...im gonna continue reading bc i expect great things from here...i like it.harry and his dreams...lol...reminds me of someone i know.(no, not me!

Great chapter. This is a great story so far. I kept seeing it in the newly updated page so I finally decided to read it. I love and I can't wait to read more. Good job.

Great story. Can't wait to read more. I like the balance between romance and action. The plot continues to thicken as the love and drama continue to get exciting. Good work. Can't wait to read more.

Another very well written chapter. This plot is a very unique one compared to the other stories that I've read on here. Keep up the good work.

hey great chapter. what a quick update (keep it up), and in time for christmas too.

That was great.Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.

I'm sorry, maybe it's just me but I find this story quite confusing. I really enjoy the storyline but it hops to different places so quickly i'm just not keeping up with it.
Like, first he's being interrogated by plice (or wizard thingys) and then parvatis hurt then they're all better, then harry argues with ron..it goes really fast.
Take your time, describe days..the time...even the weather (the sun was setting later that day, it was about 6 when..) because I feel its going to fast.

Well, enough with the critique, I really love the story/plot. And its nice (and slightly creepy) to have Harry acting like a normal, horny young man. He's often so...perfect. And I also like your version of how Harry vs. Voldemort goes. Nice to see Hermione have a part in it too!'
keep up the good work!

You're doing a great job with the details. One recommendation of something that you might want to do in future chapters to make it easier to follow is to find a way to seperate events that have a time or place difference (like if one paragraph is set at one time and the next two weeks later, or if one paragraph two people are talking in one place and the next is two other people talking at the same time, but they're in a different place). That'll make it easier for your readers to know where the breaks are in the story. Otherwise, you appear to be doing a great job. I haven't noticed any major grammar errors or anything of that sort in the last couple of chapters either.