I LOVE your concept of the story.Personally i don't think Lily and Remus go together.Meybe you could write an extended versio telling how Lily and Harry got on without James.GREAT JOB!

I like everything but the last part... It doesnt really fit, not just the idea of her moving on (because thats a good idea) but i think it that needed to be more explained than in 2 or 3 lines.. but besides that, i really loved it. great job!

God that's soo sad I...I can't stop crying.. seriously!!! I HATE it but I love it if you know what I mean.. It's at times like these you can find ONE good thing about that night..(exept that Harry survived and Voldie half died.. hehe ) atleast they didn't have to live without each other, atleast they both died.. (please don't roll your eyes..It's hwo I am )

'Hello dear


On a warm springtime day


Birds are chirping.

Hello dear


On a hot summer day


The ocean is warm


Spraying salty mist into the air


Love is on a roll.


And I miss you


I still love you.


Dogs are barking.


And flowers are blooming.


I still love you.

Hello dear


On a crisp autumn day


Leaves crackling beneath my feet


As I walk through the cemetery


Red, orange, yellow and brown


They're beautiful


But I need you.


I still love you.

Hello dear


On a cold winter day


Colder than your breath


Hot cocoa memories swirling in my mind.


I wish you were my mittens to keep me warm.


I wish you were my jacket to wrap yourself around me


I wish you were my scarf to touch my lips.


And I hate you for dying.


But I still love you.'
how poetic. and you made it all up? wow. keep writing!

I LOVE IT!!!!1 SOOO MUCH!!!!! YOU SHOULD DEFINETLY WRITE ANOTHER ONE!!!!!!! Why do you despise it?

oo i like it, yo umust like write a compainion or somehing. and i love the poem

I really don't think remus would do that, and no offense but I don't think Lily would have just run, even if she could. She loved James too much, she wouldn't've left him to die. But it was written well, so it was good.

WHAT WAS THAT????? HELLO!!! REMUS IS WAY TOO LOYAL TO JAMES TO BETRAY HIM!!! WHEN U MARRY SOMEONE ITS FOR LOVE NOT FOR COMPANIONSHIP!!!!

The thing I don't like is the fact that she's marrying Remus. But your poem is great, it really goes with the story. Do you enjoy writing poetry? I do. Or maybe you should write a story on what would happen if James and Lily hadn't died that night. You don't have to do it though, it's just a suggestion. Write another one!

Very sad, and the poem was beautiful, but I just can't see her ending up with Remus. I guess I love the L/J pairing too much for that. Great job though!

Nice. But I can't believe that you're having Remys marry Lily.

*whacks Remus and Lily and SIRE_JAPE very hard* Nooo!! L/J forever!! And R/S forever and no R/L!!
But the poem is good.

x Cazzy x

I think that this was beautiful! I love it i really do and it's so swet! please do another one PLEASE!
Jessi