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SO CUTE, SO CUTE, so cute so cute so cute. Such acute story. OMG ILOVE H H FANFICS, if you know any toher really good writers please send me and e-mail. THANks, AND KEEP WRITING PLEASE!!!!!!! |
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KenSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 06/12/05
This is very well done I thought, I would have loved to see more interaction with Hermione in this or the sequel. That was lovely too. |
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Very well done story. Harry's thoughts, both positive and angsty, felt very true to the Harry we know. Loved the "they should seriously rethink this idea" bit.  Weddings tend to generate those kinds of thoughts, somehow. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 03/12/05
Sorry, but no. Even theoretically it just doesn't gel. The redhead won. deal. |
Author Feedback: That, right there, was very sad. This is not a competition, no one is trying to win anything. And unless I'm mistaken, which I'm not, for I have HBP, she was dumped at the end. I don't have to deal with jack, but you apparently do if you have time to waste flaming me. Get help.
Tsk tsk tsk, if you didn't like the ship you should not have read the story in the first place. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 28/11/05
man, I think your portrayal of Harry in almost all your stories is very skewed and borderline spiteful at times. But there are others when he redeems himself.
In this one, the lines of "Ah yes, you are quite a wonder Harry James Potter." was below the belt. Even when I Discard the sham of JKR's that was HBP, I find that Harry was always portrayed as noble and loyal to friends. Even in HBP he was as such. I would so like to have changed the way the pairings went in HBP - or even settled for a decent romantic pairing and portrayal by JKR for Harry (instead of abruptly throwing him with Ginny in HBP). But even then, I can't think that Harry would callously not care about Ron and Ginny as you have portrayed.
I guess HBP necessitates a lot of these stories. But, I like the ones that care to explain away the anomalies or just plain ignore HBP and treats Harry/Hermione as meant to be. Rather than the ones that sort of twist the hero out of character. After all, he is more than half the reason the story exits. |
Author Feedback: The line you quoted was meant in humour, and not as a direct insult on Harry. I do not at all believe that Harry would not care for his friends like that, but we can't all be noble and loyal all the time. It was a simply a selfish thought, if Ron can be selfish why can't Harry?
And, seeing that many other fine authors here are already explaining the anomalies and ignoring HBP, I thought I would like to try something different. There is nothing wrong with that is there?
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SabineSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/10/05
I'll have to borrow the word Harry searched for through this story-- perfect-- to tell you how much I enjoyed it. Gorgeous, gorgeous fic. :-D |
Author Feedback: Thanks. To be perfectly honest, like Harry I searched constantly until I found that word too. I'm glad you like it.  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 17/10/05
This is amazing! Well amazing x6. ^^
Its perfect. (Get it?) ^_^
Well keep writing, you will never go unnoticed.
I can't believe you only have 11 reviews. |
Author Feedback: Yes, I got it, funny. 
I am going to try to keep writing, I must admit I love it very much.
Thank you so much for reading! |
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That was great...esp the bit with Quirrel-Mort and the Troll at the end.
All in all, a nice bit of fluff.
Thanks |
Author Feedback: No, thank you! 
It took me a while to get that last line, I'm glad you liked it. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 17/10/05
I just LOVED your story!!!
You really should write a sequel!!!!!!!  |
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lierianSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 17/10/05
I love your writing. You very beautifully capture Harry's epiphany in a moving manner interspersed with moments of humor such as Luna's helpfullness much to Harry's chagrin (giggles). Looking forward to reading more by you,
Lierian |
Author Feedback: Thank you!
I was hoping to do that. And Luna, well, I like her frankness too and just thought she would be most helpful at that moment.
I will try to bring more. |
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InkJetSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 17/10/05
Aww ... That was really sweet! I really liked it. |
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You know I've never read anything in second person before. It was kind of odd at first, but as the story went along I got used to it. Oh and speaking of this story... it was freaking awsome. |
Author Feedback: I heard that the second person narrative is actually rarely used in stories, and after reading a few I stumbled upon when I first joined portkey, I thought I should try it out. I'm guessing I did something right then? Thank you so much! |
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I loved it. Why haven't you gotten more reviews for this story? It's great and I actually think that you should make a longer story off of it. Congrats on your writing skills.
-Bryana |
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Amusing, but Harry does come across as a bit shallow. After all, it took Hermione getting all dolled up as a real 'gurrl' for him to finally wake up to his feelings for her. Ginny does come off a tad poorly, still calling her soon-to-be sister-in-law 'Phlegm'; tacky, girl, very tacky! Still, for a short vignette about one of those life altering moments that sneak up and lay us out with a poleaxe, very sweet indeed! |
Author Feedback: Yeah, I know. But he had to be shallow, it seems nothing short of a sharp blow to the skulll *coughANVILcough* will ever wake him up. In this case its her physical appearance, because he still seems to be heading after the typical pretty girls so he had to see someone already pretty... um... enhanced.
Yeah and I'm still griping about Ginny Sue in canon so she will come off that way... maybe until I calm down or maybe Book 7 hits the stores. Whichever.
Thanks for reading. |
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ivyUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 16/10/05
i really like this chapter. short but very sweet!!!! harry is such a boy here. keep writing! |
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