Wow, I'm utterly speechless. This was just breathtaking, it was so passionate and dark and it makes you want more. Beautiful.

hella good story u r soooo my favorite author. mwah xoxo

This was good. I think it shows the dark side that most Draco Ginny fics don't capture without having Ginny convert into a Death Eater or something. Good Job.

Beautifully depressinh and so bittersweet. I love the style you wrote it in, with the parenthesis and rythym. This story is so haunting and eloquent that I know I'll be thinking about it for awhile.

This was wonderfully written and very poetic, in a dark way. Loved reading it!

i love the way you didnt reveal the characters till about half way through, and used he/she, it kept the mood dark.

Great job, i really liked this, please write more stories, they're really good!

whoa...that was hot. i loved this story. its so full of pain and sorrow, yet so passionate. i can't wait to find out more of what you've written. excellent work!

That Is probably the best story I have ever read on portkey. Definently the best single capter story...Your use of parenthesis adds a kind of stream of conciousness feel to the whole thing, and the repetition makes it seem unbelievably important...Overall completely beautiful and moving, I beg of you, keep writing, because you could certainly go far if you set your mind to it...
Margot

Gulp! errrr ok. WOW Let me get my breath now. LOL Talking about erotic!

This was really, really good! I really enjoyed it! The raw passion was amazing and inspiring. Very well done! Keep up the fabulous writing!

This first chapter was excellent. I can't wait for future updates

Very intense. I could feel all their pain...sadness, anger... I liked this story very much.

I liked it, but your use of brackets was distracting. In the last paragraph, it fit surprisingly well, like whispers of truth behind the words, but the rest just took away from the story. I think you could go back and edit this a bit, maybe even add a sequel if your up to it. Good job.