that was good is it going to be a one shot it would be a good sotry to keep going if it is tehn thats great too but if its nto its a great story

that was good is it going to be a one shot it would be a good sotry to keep going if it is tehn thats great too but if its nto its a great story

...What can one really say after a story such as that? I would say WOW, but I really don't think that would about cover it. I'm really amazed at your talemt and I do hope to read more from you in later days.

Again, it was truly amazing, smashing, and all that lot.

God bless,
S'Eleene Paris

A vrery nice job, very hot and yet it started so sweet, in fact maybe a tad to much of both? i don't know why but I almost felt like i was reading two seperate stories. I mean I like caring and plot and romance with my smut so I'm not sure why it seemed that way to me but thats my reaction. As for the people that didn't like the R/Hr history....well grow up. very few people stay with their 'first' As annoying, even painful as it is R/Hr are what J.K. sees[why, god why?] so if a writer is working off cannon, its going to be there.
Good job again hope to see more from you.

now thats quite an unusual use for a wand

Loved the one-shot, would love to read some more soon

For the most part, I truly enjoyed this story.

I loved how Hermione reacted when she realized that Harry was noticing her legs; her body language was telling Harry how she felt before she even knew it. I also found the idea that it was Harry who knew when as well as to where to look for Hermione to be very in character. Their conversation was nicely handled, as was their discussion as to how to face up to their friends in regards to their new situation of being together. And, admittedly, the actual sex scene was extremely steamy.

However, as I stated it was for the most part. Unfortunately, I found one part of the story to be extremely jarring, almost to the point of making me lose track of the plot. And that was the whole discussion of Hermione’s sex life with Ron. This bothered me for a few reasons. First off, there is really no reason that Harry would ask Hermione if they had done it on the bed they were laying on. It would just bring up the specter of her previous lover – one she is obviously still attempting to get over, considering the fact that she is hiding away from Ron and her earlier inner-dialogue. Remember, this is Harry; he knows her and would know what she is thinking about as shown by the comment of wanting to make her forget about all the times that she cried about the break up with Ron. And to then ask if it was her first time? No way would he want to continue at that point, in that room, on that bed.

A second reason was the unfairness of this sharing: we find out that Hermione slept with Ron, but she doesn’t ask about Harry and his experiences? That does not seem to fit. They apparently do have secrets from one another, as odd as that may seem, given that Harry had to ask Hermione about her experiences. But she did not reciprocate the question? The girl with the thirst for knowledge?

And the final reason is that it just rubs me wrong. Yes, in HBP the four characters do unfortunately pair up. Yet, Harry and the previously blank slate that was Ginny break up before they progress beyond the kissing stage. So why would you have the canon supported incompatible coupling of Hermione and Ron progress beyond that same stage? To make the assumption that just because Ron is shown petting Hermione’s hair, they are going to end up being sex partners is, to me, ludicrous. Not every pairing in the Potter-universe automatically ends up in bed together. I guess that my optimistically romantic delusional image is that *both* Harry and Hermione remain chaste and pure until they discover each over. Yes, it’s not realistic, yet in your story you come across implying that Harry never went farther with Ginny, so why did Hermione *have* to have slept with Ron. It really did nothing to promote the storyline in the slightest. As I stated in my first reason, if anything, it made the situation and the character response seem to be very unrealistic.

I’m sorry if this comes across as a flame or a slam. It was not my intention. I just wanted to point out the one plot point that nearly ruined a very well written story for me

Chris

wwwwwwwweeeeeeeeeee! I don't think I read a HBP spoiler smut before. I think everything fit perfectly, cuz a lot of times the angst in this setting is too depressing and I don't finish the story. But this was perfect.

Ummmmm. Hang on, getting my breath back.
Okay. Wow! Good for you. That zig zagged in and out of my own mental image of Harry comfort zone but it was just wonderfully done and very true to your intent! Lots of lovely moments and plenty of frankly hot ones I adored the image at the end of them in the Weasley garden, fingers hooked together.

"Harry leans up on one elbow and looks Hermione straight in the eye. "That's the big difference between you and Ginny. She let me go off without her, but you-- after all that you and me and Ron had been through together, you wouldn't let me go without you. We were going to do it together, somehow, even though I had to stand up to Voldemort by myself in the end. You wouldn't let me do it all alone."

"Perhaps I just knew you a little better than she did. And perhaps I went into it with both eyes open. To Ginny, you were always like a rock star. To me--"

"I was just Harry. And you knew I needed you. And I still do, even if I haven't said it or acted like it in a long time."

I think that sums it up so nicely, LOVE the image of Harry looking back on HBP that way - 'cause it's the only real explanation to me. They are so real there, two people who've lived a bit and can look back with stronger and wiser eyes now that they're coming clean to each other. I cherish a happy delusion that something along these lines could happen in canon even if it's an epilogue. Thanks for giving us all a glimpse of what it could be like.

Thanks for putting this up here, and ignore the die hards (perused your reviews ) It's a big world, and we are all better off exploring each others visions than just siting around in our own! Our delusions should be bigger than that! Great job.
Lynney

Wow! I honestly liked it all, including the past reference to a Ron/Hermione and Harry/Ginny relationship. That just made me feel like I should still have hope even in canon that Harry and Hermione will get together eventually. Anyway, the story was beautifully written! Well done! Keep up the great work!!!

that was a cute on I liked it very nice

Wow. Just..wow. Greatly written. I cannnot believe more people haven't replied to this! Seriously, it's amazing. I hope you continue writing more stories soon, you're a great author.

I think this could have been good enough to send into the felix competition expect for the NC17 rating

"Perhaps I just knew you a little better than she did. And perhaps I went into it with both eyes open. To Ginny, you were always like a rock star. To me--"
"I was just Harry. And you knew I needed you."
Perfect. That's it exactly. Well done.

I loved this!

My favorite parts:

Hermione drawing her knees up under her skirt when she realizes that Harry's looking at them.

Harry getting on to Hermione for thinking that she wasn't good enough for Ron and the ensuing tenderness.

Harry and Hermione making love on Ron's bed!

And, them standing together in the garden--loved them hooking little fingers. Very sweet moments of realization.

Wonderful work, OH! Thanks for the great read.


CF4B

couldv been better if there was no mention of r/hr sex . is harry a dominatin male in ur story??? fuck her in the bed where she lost her viginity w/ r on?