DragonfliSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/05/06
What a nice story! It's so sweet, I loved it! And it's nice that they aren't yelling at each other or anything... They're just nice, both so nice. Great work! |
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Leah CarSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 11/04/06
'I dunno. I thought it was cute… ' it was. just... didn't she say that he liked her from first year? but then they couldn't go to hogsmede.
'She was like a clear pool, untouched by modern day, still clean and unpolluted. I felt that, by interacting with her, my pollution would mix with her water. I felt like I was kick mud into her clear pool. I felt so dirty in comparison. ' I like that, how poetic. keep writing |
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omg when i first read it i was thinking "omg lily is so nice" nice point of view making her like that it really makes things seem..better in the world lol(i know how weird that sounds but i am SOO weird)  |
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Awww...Lily's so innocent! She make me feel as though I'm as evil as James! Well...I take evil as a complimment. James, being the hero of our time, wanting to be there, next to her, protecting her from all, guarding the little princess from the evil side of the Earth. Good fic! Love it!  |
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Awww...Lily's so innocent! She make me feel as though I'm as evil as James! Well...I take evil as a complimment. James, being the hero of our time, wanting to be there, next to her, protecting her from all, guarding the little princess from the evil side of the Earth. Good fic! Love it! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 17/08/05
This is much more endearing than most I've read. It is interesting and believeable because it is a foundation of brotherliness that could lead to fighting but could eventually develop into love and a relationship. I love it. |
Author Feedback: Thank you! I'm very pelased with this one-shot! I'm glad to see that a lot of people have seen all the foreshadowing and other stuff I've thrown in there. |
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  It's a really cute story, like you thought. I honstly had no idea ow describe a story like that without your note at the end. |
Author Feedback: Thank you! I suppose I could easily sum it up because I wanted it to be cute XD |
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i liked it. it's the first James/Lily I have ever read. From what i've heard though, she is not innocent as she can say some evil stuff when she wants. i liked this story tho. it was nice and a different look at their relationship. |
Author Feedback: The first? Wow. I'm flattered. Well, yes, she's not exactly as cute in OOtP, but I wanted to make her like this for the effect of the story. I'm glad you enjoyed my story, though. |
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WOW, you should SO carry this story on, it's amazing. i like the way you portraied lily in this it's kind of how i see her. hehe
nice story. |
Author Feedback: Well, thank you! I didn't know anyone really thought of her that way. In most of the fics I've read Lily isn't very... Sweet, I suppose... But I don't think I'll continue. It's nice to know that someone wants me to, but I'd never be able make Lily's character realistic and perfect in the long run. |
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TraceyUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 16/08/05
I thought it was cute, too.
This bit struck me: "She didn't belong here. The world was so tainted, so dirty."
It's almost as if, if your 'total saint' Lily was the canon Lily, then her and James dying young could have been a preserving act for her innocence and delicacy as well as a saving act for Harry. What a romantic (in a literary sense) notion! |
Author Feedback: Yay! May the cuteness take over and destory the angst-y fics! MUAHAHAHA!!! 
Ahhh... I really think I out-did myself with the lovely metaphors in this one. And yeah, it was kind of like that. I had this whole thing going in my head where she was still innocent, and then she died, forever preserving her innocence, you know? I'm glad someone noticed!  |
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I think this story is kinda cute too.
This is the first story I read with Lily being a saint. I think it makes Lily seem wrong. It seems like she too perfect and I never imagined Lily to be that way.
I agree with James in this story. Lily is so innocent and there aren't any saints around anymore. I just haven't met one yet. You want to protect Lily so that she stays innocent.
I like the way this story is written and it's very creative too! I read your other story, Two Thirds. I enjoyed that and I hope you would write more soon. |
Author Feedback: Thank you! I know what you mean about the Saint!Lily. I don't think she'd really be like that, but I just wanted to try it out and I thought it'd be rather cute. But I'd never be able to expand on this. It'd end up tacky with everyone hating Lily. Oh well.
Yeah, that's the main reason I made her so saint-y. Because James is such a nice guy that he wants to protect her from the horrible world out there. But in the end, she is killed... The good die young, as they say! Okay, that was mean of me...
Thank you! I didn't really like Two Thirds very much, but it's good to hear someone did. However, thanks for the compliments. I enjoy them... -head swells- I think I will write more soon... Not on this story, but other stuff. |
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So incredibly cute. Some stories have Lily acting totally angelic, but they make it so unrealistic. Your Lily was innocent yet fun at the same time. I really like this! |
Author Feedback: Thanks! I hope it wasn't too tacky. I thought it was, a bit. I don't think I'd be able to write a whole story wtih her like this, but a one-shot was pretty easy for me to do. I've always wanted to do 'out-of-the-box' Lily/James stories. I've been writing one, which will (hopefully) be very uncliched, and a really different look at how LIly and James could have been, but I haven't gotten very far, yet. I plan on posting it when I've finished writing it. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 16/08/05
awww....its sweet! now i could tell why james likes lily so much! and the penny thing, is it true that if you face them upward, the next person who finds gets good luck? i thot finding a penny is just good luck...but i like ur idea so much better! its so sweet, i wish you would write more lily and james fics! |
Author Feedback: Well, I've always heard that you had to find a penny face up... But thanks for reviewing! I have written some toher Lily/James on my fanfiction account. But I'm still undecided on whether I should post them on here or not. |
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I really liked Lily like that - most people don't portray her like that. She kind of reminded me of Luna - but I can totally see that James would want to protect her. All in all, I really liked this fic, esp. the ending. Good job! |
Author Feedback: Thank you! I wanted to give a shot at Lily being all... Saint-y and stuff. Usually she's all "grrr" if you know what I mean. Not that those aren't great fics as well, but I wanted to portray a nice Lily.
I can see the whole Luna angle. I actually thought she resembled Luna during the beginning part a bit, but then she got more serious, I think.
Well, I'm glad you saw my point. I felt I missed it a bit, but I guess I wasn't too off. I liked writing the ending, too. I'm into metaphors and stuff. |
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