This is an absolutely cracking story. I've read loads of songfics (don't really like them, 'cause no matter how good the author, they never seem to pick the RIGHT song) and this is the only one I've liked. Meatloaf... not traditionally used for romance, but you picked a cracking song and wrote a cracking fic. Not really a lot more I can say about it.

It's me again! COOL!! love it. If you give me a scale from 1-10 to rate your story, I'll give you 9!

I am still in my mad/angry/despairing mood after reading that delusional interview, so I really can't find it in my heart to pity Ron right now.

I used to think JKR was brilliant, but now I'm not so sure.

If she could write stories where the hero doesn't end up with the heroine, and where the smart/bright/intelligent heroine goes for the cowardly/not-so-bright sidekick, then I think JKR does not really understand human psyche that much after all.

Is she trying to recreate LOTR's Aragorn-Arwen-Eowyn love triangle with Harry-Hermione-Ginny?

Or dare I hope that JKR will redeem herself in Book 7?

Oh how sad for Ron... I have never read a Ron-angst fanfic. The tears of a broken romance, geez I almost feel sorry for him. He is a good guy.

hmm, not bad, I've always loved that Meatloaf Song, glad someone was able to write a fic around it

Hmm, hard to say what I think, but what I think about this story is that although the couple is ultimately H/Hr, it has an overly R/Hr feel. I thought Ron was very out of character--in fact, if you hadn't mentioned some more specific stuff, I would've thought it was Harry talking. Remember, Ron has the emotional range of a teaspoon... So, all in all, I think it would've been a much more effective H/Hr fic if you had Harry talking. Although that would mean you've put R/Hr together, it would also mean that you'd get a lot more of an emotional reaction--albeit, a bit more typical. I have trouble reconciling the idea that Ron would ever feel so sad about a girl, especially Hermione. He's too much of a happy-go-lucky kind of guy and this thinking stuff isn't really for him.

I thought this was a good fic. You really did a nice job describing Ron's feelings, making him a sympathetic character, and matching the story and the song lyrics together. Even though the trio has broken in your story, I liked the fact that you didn't make Ron evil, or a completely irredeemable jerk (which has pretty much been the norm in most fics I've read since HBP came out).

I feel for Ron in this story, I really do. Harry and Hermione belong, they just fit somehow, but how do you reconcile that with another boy in the picture? Someone in the Trio has to get hurt or left out (unless they all end up with three different people), and I'd much prefer that it was Ron, rather than Harry.

It's ironic really, I think that Harry would give anything for the family that Ron's got, and Ron would give the same for the life that he thinks Harry's got. All in all, I think you summed up that longing pretty well.

Very nice and so very true. That's how I see it, too. Ron just cannot give Hermione what she really needs. Your words were beautifully written. Thanks!

think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron
think I did. But, you know, if you think about it, I only did it because I was drunk out of my wits from the twin's spiked butterbeer. Had I been of clear conscience and mind, I never would have hurt Crookshanks a bit. Wouldn't have laid a finger. Sure, probably a swift kick in the arse for being so sodding annoying, but never… never that. So, if you think about it, they're the ones who killed Crookshanks. Not me.”




But as Harry could only gape at him and Ron

Oooh, I lurve it! But I feel so sorry for Ron, though... I don't think that he is Harry's sidekick or second fiddle actually--I truly think that Ron is a hero... but that's my perspective. What I also think is that Ron IS good enough for Hermione, but I'm a H/Hr shipper because I think that Harry's the BEST for Hermione. Still, I really love this fic. Keep writing!

This is so great! Very good story and I love the song. keep writing1!

This seemed like a ramble to me, more like a piece of poetry than fanfic, showing Ron's feelings at one instant of time as opposed to a story that covers an event and peoples actions in that event. Now mind you, I also have written a ramble-piece myself, so I realize that sometimes you just have to get it out there. This 'fic' does look like it has the potential to grow into a story of it's own, even if it's only a one-shot. Too many questions from too little explanation left it a bit flat. A bit more description could change it from a bit of babble to a nice emotions piece. Or even a follow up fic, oooo, one from each of the Trio. I did feel Ron's pain, you got that down pretty good, but I didn't get any sense of where it was really coming from. If that was your goal, then forget the entire previous part. In that case, well done!

Awww...very sad and poignant, I honestly felt very sorry for Ron after I read this. And the song you chose was perfect and added to the grief that is presented here.

Very well-written, nice work!

Shaliza

i think this is a very, very good story (even though i have never heard the song). it was sad, though.