I just have a quick question:
What do you mean by 'He woke Hermione and Ron, who were beginning the failings of their “mating ritual” and showed them it.' as it is put?
Where Ron and Hermione in the same bed? Did Ron and Hermione try to have sex and couldn't? Or did they and Ron messed up and left Hermione frustratedly unsatisfied and angry and no longer a virgin?
If they did have sex...that would really depress me...Ron isn't good enough for Hermione...Harry should be the one she has first...in my opinion. Did I ever mention that I really hate Ron? Well I do...he makes my stomach turn and my skin crawl....blah...
OK so that was more than one question...I just didn't understand that part.
I find the rest of this chapter interesting and think it will make for a good story when you are able to add more to it with updates.
Looking forward to seeing chapter alerts in my email.