OK that was good  but like i said before you need to write some reaction to what the characters are saying, how harry would react when ginny discovered he was two timing her and i didn't see anything coming from him so... well that's just a thought but anyway you're a nice writer, maybe you just need to improve a little  |
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Nice chapter, i just have a feeling about it, i expected ginny's reaction to draco's feelings to be more... mm... how can i explain it? well i just thought she would be shocked and... i don't know... she would run away or something like that, i didn't see any reaction besides telling him that she loves harry so it would have been nice to actually see her shocked. Well that's a feeling i have but besides it, the chapter's great  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/06/07
Heey,
I'm gonna try to add a nice review cuz I'm Dutch  (and my English is kinda bad ^^)
Anyway. I did like your story, it's not very surprising, but not bad either.
I think it's bullshit to stop writing. Just some more practice would help.
The story wasn't boring to me. I write books myself and I know its not that easy to write the perfect story that everyone would like.
I liked the end also. It's not what I expected, but it's nice
xx |
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harrylvr09Unsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 21/10/06
I loved it, but in it, ya kinda make Harry seem weak, and sometimes it sounded like you skipped something. (I understand, My stories are like that, too. Called a brain-fart ) |
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kittyUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 15/06/06
hey.... don't take this as a flame because its not - more like crits that will hopefully be helpful!
i think you have the right idea of the storyline but maybe just fill it out a bit more and make it over a longer timespan than just 1 or 2 days. Love involves trust and knowing the person and you need to show ginny's change from hate to love more gradually - remember, he's been taunting her for her whole so she won't just forget about that all of a sudden. i don't know if you have a beta, but i think another person's input before you post could be really beneficial. i've never beta'd before, but if you reply to this, and you want me to, i'd be more than happy to give it a go!
i'd really love to see you take another look at this story because it does have potential - it just needs a bit of work.
well done for all the effort so far and keep writing and improving! |
Author Feedback: Hi :]
This is Shannon's sister, Caity. I'm handling her reviews at the moment (they are, after all, under my user name).
Thank you for the kind review. She doesn't get many of those, does she? :[
Yes, her storyline definitely has potenial, it was a nice thought, but she's only 11-years-old. She hasn't found her proper writing style yet, and she hasn't had enough learning experience in the writing department yet. I'm helping her, and my beta agreed to beta her story for her. So, shes in good hands :]]
After we finish helping her, we're going to repost her story. Check it out and let us know what you thought of the revision.
Again, thank you for one of her only kind reviews. It's appreciated.
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 21/10/05
u really suck..don write anymore stories..u r also very rude..both of u suck |
Author Feedback: How am i rude, you know what your flame is telling me, i don't care the hell about!
BYE
Love,
Shannon |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 21/10/05
honestly..this story really sucks like shiit.. the storyline is poor and the writieng skills suck..u shldn write any more stories..wasting of space.. |
Author Feedback: "This sucks like shiit" is that the best you could do, besides you didn't even spell shit the right way. It sounds more like "Sheet"
Well, today for your lack, i will keep writing, and for your information, they all don't suck! check out, Far From My Love, and Locked!And if you think they still suck, well that's just too bad for you, because does it look like the hell i care!
Have a nice day.
FREAK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Love,
Shannon |
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Hmmm... seemed almost a little spastic, but in a good way! It was really entertaining to read, and had a sweet ending |
Author Feedback: thank you (said in a wonderful way) |
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Hee hee How cute LOL hey i like it !!!! very nice!!! |
Author Feedback: Thank you, atleast i know have 2 good reviews Thanks Hermione Jane Potter .
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Shannon |
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I didn't like the story. It was too out of character. Why would Ginny even trust Draco? Especially with all the drama between their families. |
Author Feedback: Well in a Draco/Ginny story they have to trust eachother. That why it's called Draco/Ginny. Duh!  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 05/09/05
umm...wow, i'm sorry but i think this story isn't one of your best...it's full of cliches and things happen too fast and its just...unrealistic. but nice try |
Author Feedback: Okay |
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CalleyUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 27/08/05
this story sucks. and ive been reading all of your reviews. and if u havent noticed..half of them are flamers so maybe you should take the hint and stop writing...yeah good job and ruining the characters and sucking so badly |
Author Feedback: You know what, putting my story on the internet and taking time to write it and type can take a while, and it can be hard tp try to think of what to put in it. Then add lots of detail, then I put it on the internet and all everyone does is complain how lame it is for when i tryed to at least make it a little good. So what you can do, is try to cut me some slack, instead of complaining and being a brat about it. So just cut a girl some slack. You got that!! Lets see you try to write, type, and put a Harry Potter story on the internet. Maybe you do, though you don't haft to be so rude about someone else's work. OKAY!!! I bet if you put some stories on the internet, those suck to.  Oh and if you didn't notice i can be a good writer, all you have to do, is read the reviews of Far From My Love, then read it. You must not read much. You are what i call someone who is not appreciated of some one else's work. SO SHUT-UP, with your bratty attitude, this is ticking me off. OKAY. And don't look at me like that!!! One more thing when you left a review for my sister Caity, you can leave me out of it. The last thing you can do is be a brat. Shut-Up Your BUTT!!!
Sincerely,
Shannon
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 22/08/05
Your story sucks. and thats about it blah blah i need 10 words blah |
Author Feedback: 1. Right back at you.
2. You are also a blah
3. oh and thats not ten words, thats fourteen you idiot. |
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Ummm what can i say? BORING and it sucked. But dont worry im sure if you practice u'll get better.  |
Author Feedback: Thanks
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MichelleUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 21/08/05
Your story sucks, it was way too rushed. It was really OOC. |
Author Feedback: your Harsh!!! You suck too!!! |
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