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I like your idea and plot, but this chapter was very confusing. The dioluge didn't flow well, and it was weird to read the end of the chapter. Harry kept describing Voldermort as the lord. Also the imagery was hard to picture and the grammer and spelling need to be looked at better. I am sorry if this sounds mean, but I felt it needed to be said. |
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what is harry different from and what does Hermione want to talk to harry about good job 
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 6 | Date : 25/02/06
what happens to volemort and does flure love ron so does ron marry flure where does harry and hermione get married.do they get married at hogwart where everyone see them get married and do harry and hermione have kids of their own and does flure and ron have kids too... |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 25/02/06
does hermione marry harry and does ron get jealous of harry and hermione. then who marries ron...
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this is your author Thanks for reading this story, had fun reading it
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Shannon |
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MioneUnsigned | Chapter : 6 | Date : 09/09/05
It was really good,very sweet,great and you really did a great job with this ffc,i enjoyed this soooo much and thanks a lot for sharing this story with us  |
Author Feedback: As you enjoyed reading it, i loved writing it. It was also a lot of fun.
Thank you reader, and when the surprise comes, i hope you'll like it.
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Shannon |
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awwwwwwwwwwwwww I didnt want to see this end  it was really good i wish there could be more thanks for writing it anyways !!!! 
~*Hermione Jane Potter*~ |
Author Feedback: You could say there is more, all you haft to do is wait about, maybe 2 to 4 weeks. You'll like this surprise.
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 07/09/05
wow that wasnt to good you wrote it to rushed it seems like you just wanted to get it dont and also the wording sounds like you just wanted to finish it |
Author Feedback: I'm sorry, but if you really thought it was bad. Look at all my reviews. 
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ok then, that was a good ending to the story
email me when you get your account
but seriously, take my advice
please tell me what the second surprise is |
Author Feedback: Okay Science` boy i'll tell you but keep it on the down low, [Don't tell anybody;]
It's that i will have a sequel to this story for all you Fans. Sequel means another story to go with this.
Thanks for reading . I had alot of fun doing this Oh and i need your email address. Thanks!
Shannon
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Super! I loved it!I will post my own stories really soon,too.
I hope you read them!
Kisses n hugs,
Joanne |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you read my story and also enjoyed it. Now this is funny, i'm almost saying if i'm going to post a next chapter.
Doing this story was alot of fun. Once i get my own account i will delete these storys and put them onto my own account. This story i will call it the new and improved Far From My Love! Its the same only better edited and with more detail. I hope you will like it
Also i'll give you a hint to what the next surprise is. I will be making a sequel to this story.
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Cool chapter! Mistakes: Only one(that I've noticied)"...I have a feeling that you don't wont" maybe you meant want, isn't it? Don't forget to check grammar and spelling after you finish the chapeter
Keep on with the good work!  |
Author Feedback: Yes it was supposed to be want. Yes i'm checking my spelling and grammar. I am running a little late for my last chapter. I know it should've been in by Sat, Sorry but it wasn't  I will have it in soon
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three words
"CHECK YOUR SPELLING!"
i saw alot of mistakes, and i am not the best with spelling
get a beta
you'd better do more of this more
also, check your punctuation |
Author Feedback: Thanks for the reaminder. I will be sure to ckeck it
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Shannon
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MioneUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 28/08/05
That was a very good chapeter,you are doing a great job with this ffc and i hope that you post more soon,it was a very good post |
Author Feedback: I am glad you liked it, so far i had fun, my next update will be in by Friday!
Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Shannon
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HPfanSigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 28/08/05
nice chap!
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DylanUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 28/08/05
I'm not going to be too critical because I like your idea, but the dialogue doesn't seem right in places. I don't think Harry would give Voldemort any respect by addressing him as Dark Lord Voldemort. You see what I mean.
Oh, and for one moment I thought we had a great flambouyant baddie in Luscious but I guess you meant Lucius 
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Author Feedback: Thank you for the support of the story, and thanks for reading. Harry would mostly adress the lord, as Voldemort or just the Dark Lord Voldemort. I had fun writing this chapter, i hope you like the next. My next chapter will be in by Friday i think. It will be the last chapter
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