I LIKE your story!!! Although I'm very much waiting for the day that Terry would be booted out from the ministry because of his pompousity. Hehe  |
Author Feedback: Thank you very much. Terry will probably be around some more in later chapters; though whether he actually get what you think he deserves or not is a secret.  |
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jchaserSigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 06/01/06
Wait...that's the end of the chapter...oh, you cannot leave us hanging. Wonderfully written again - could picture it all in my head - the same one I am now banging on the desk wanting there to be more...please take pity and update soon.  |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter as well! Your reviews never fail to make my day. Hopefully the next chapter comes out faster; although a new plot idea that popped up recently is making me consider rewriting what little of the next chapter I have down. |
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h/hr4everSigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 06/01/06
i have to say i'm a bit confused, we're jumping alot through time and i can't find the loose ends... but i'm sure the answers will come soon. |
Author Feedback: I'm so sorry that this chapter confused you! Most of it was set in the present time, while the scene with Ginny at the end is Harry looking back to one of the things he had sacrificed for the war and how he would have handled it differently if it had happened now.
Is that helpful or do you still find it confusing? Please e-mail me at ( mmefleiss at yahoo dot com) if you're still confused.  |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 06/01/06
While this is a good story, it doesn't seem very organized. The back and fourth in this story is enough to make my head spin. It would help clear the confusion if you gave us more detail about what went on between Harry and Hermione. Just better thought out chapters and a bit more detail would be nice. |
Author Feedback: Since I'm posting the story as I go, nothing is set in stone organization-wise. I might rearrange things after I'm finished if I feel it would flow better--but for now, I'm more concerned with getting the story down.
More detail about what happened between Harry and Hermione will be given at a later chapter; I'm currently experimenting with doing flashbacks in fragments as opposed to the more traditional linear style. I will definitely keep your comments in mind should I feel that it's not working later on.
Thank you very much for the review. I'm always happy to hear what does and doesn't work for readers--hopefully, it will be less confusing in later chapters. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 01/12/05
Fantastic. Fabulous. Harry and Hermione for eva. hURRY. hURRY PLZ. |
Author Feedback: The next part has actually beem written. Unfortunately, the first third of the story is in my laptop in the Philippines at the moment, so I can't send the chapter to my beta until I get back there later this week.
Glad you enjoyed it, though! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 25/11/05
ehh, it was well written but i wish that more had happened. that shouldn't be NC-17, probably an R because all they did was kiss. |
Author Feedback: More had happened during the kiss, or the story in general? It's rated R so far just to be on the safe side, though it'll robablly get bumped up to an NC-17 at some point. |
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~ “So there I was, right?” he was saying in between vicious stabs at the uncooperative hunk of chicken on his plate. “Walking around in the countryside without my wand, practically starkers, and with my skin a bright orange thanks to my new partner’s botched spell--when this lorry almost ran over me. But instead of trying to help, the driver just stared at me for a bit as if he couldn’t believe his eyes. So then I raised my right hand and told him, ‘I come in peace’ to keep him calm, y’know? Before I knew it, it was all over those Muggle newspapers that I was some kind of alien and the Ministry was giving me a citation for improper use of magic.” ~
 Funny, I can actually see that happening to Ron. 'I come in peace' ... !!
*Anxiously waits for next chapter* |
Author Feedback: Thank you, I must admit it's my favorite part of the chapter as well. Ron has a tendency to take over scenes with his outrageousness when I write him.
I'm currently on vacation, which makes working on the next chapter hard. But I'll certainly try to keep working on it. |
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Oh, finally an update!! Such a sweet gesture of Harry to pet Hermione like that, hehe... and Ron is so... Ron, I like your story, keep up with the good work! |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you liked it. Ron was a lot of fun to write. |
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kensitSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 28/09/05
oh i can't wait to read the rest of this story. it is turning out very cut but what happen to muhamed. |
Author Feedback: Sorry for the coming delay, then. Muhammad should pop up again in a couple of chapters. I just want to concentrate on Harry dealing with being home again first.
Thanks for reviewing! |
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jchaserSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 26/09/05
I was laughing so much at their exchanges but the last line from Harry was the best. Another thoroughly enjoyable read - and wonderfully written once again. |
Author Feedback: Thank you. You're certainly very good to my ego. *g*
My personal favorite is the line about Ron being mistaken for an alien. I must admit that I get a real kick out of putting Ron in ridiculous situations when I write him. I always have to be so careful that his weird hijinks don't take over the whole fic. |
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ears91Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/09/05
I've lived in various places in Michigan since I was three years old, from Detroit, where I'm currently going to school to the Upper Peninsula. |
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ears91Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 22/09/05
Trying to interfere with her love life, lol.. Ron, I'm betting it'll be over with Terry soon.. is that Terry Boot? WONDERFUL.. lol.. Didn't Boot hang out with Corner.. or was that just the entrance to the first D.A. Meeting.. either way, surprised Ginny didn't date him,, yet anyway.. lol.. guess I'll quit with the bad jibes.. keep it up!! Have a good move and all... I've moved quite a few times myself.. though all in the same country.. and in the past ten years in the same state.. but vastly different sections of it.. good luck moving. |
Author Feedback: It's Terry Boot, though I haven't decided yet how big a part he'll play in the story since this is more focused on Harry than Hermione.
Thanks for the well wishes. I think I'm going to need it as moving stuff back to the other side of the world is proving to be a huge pain in the butt.  Which state are you referring to, if you don't mind me asking? |
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ears91Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/09/05
Trafalgar Square.. where have I heard of that? Is it in London? Was it on a Flogging Molly or The Clash, or Sex Pistols album.. can't remember.... I guess I'll have to go take a listen.. Nice work.. hmm.. shall have to read the next part.. |
Author Feedback: Yes, it's in London near Charing Cross. Can't help you with the album info, though, I'm afraid. Thanks for reviewing! |
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“I guess it’s true what they say about owners coming to resemble their pets.”
“Just shut up and keep going, Harry.” I really enjoyed this bit. I will admit that at first I wasn't sure how I felt about this story, but I came to decide that I like the back story you developed for the piece, and I like Harry's attitude toward work and life. It's very realistic. I'm looking forward to more! |
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“I guess it’s true what they say about owners coming to resemble their pets.”
“Just shut up and keep going, Harry.” I really enjoyed this bit. I will admit that at first I wasn't sure how I felt about this story, but I came to decide that I like the back story you developed for the piece, and I like Harry's attitude toward work and life. It's very realistic. I'm looking forward to more! |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you decided to give it a chance. I realize it's not a very easy story to like; I had a couple of readers elsewhere who were unhappy that they're not together after they got so physically close in chapter one and have even thrived in their time apart. Hopefully, once the point I'm trying to make with this story becomes more clear, they'll understand why it had to be written this way.
Thanks for the review! |
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