You know what?I just don't get it why you gave an "R" rating to your story. I mean, there was NOTHING "R" to this story.You weren't even close to having this as an "R" story. I just don't get it!!There wasn't anything sexually explicit or gory in this story.nothing disturbing.
But maybe you could call your writing,disturbing.Yeah,maybe that's the reason why you gave this an "R".
I didn't feel the world of Harry Potter in your story.Nothing.
I really had to read the story through,thinking "why would people actually read and review this one?And oh.it's rated R!"
I was so disappointed.The ending sucked too.It's like you felt you had to put a twist at the end,so you just made richard marry some girl off and that he couldn't reproduce anymore.It's bloody pathetic!
Advice..if you really wanna write an R or NC-17 story..why don't you try it for yourself?Might give you more creative ideas...