that was awesome! i absolutely love all your work. this is your first harry/hermione one isn't it. i love your lily/james ones. Call Out Your Name is my favorite so far. oh well getting off topic. can't wait for the next chapter in this one. should be interesting.

ginny is going now? no way. what is molly going to do?! no!!! ginny can't come...what are you going to do with her? she's going to get hurt.
ron will get upset. harry?! come on.
update soon!
melissa
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hmmm, its been almost a year since you've updated - why don't you just say you have abandoned the fic?

Well, the start seems good. Maybe longer chapters would be better, but I can understand you. I used to write short ones too, now I'm improving...

Just try and limit Ginny's presence because I can't suffer her. I would have liked if she stayed back, but no, Harry ahd to go and be the hero once again...

i seem 2 b just as excited as me waiting 4 the 7th bk already. lol! i luv it!

Interesting direction this story is taking. I'm looking forward to see how you change ships in this story. I've been reading so many H/Hr stories that I've forgotten that H/G is canon! Silly me, but you've written both canon relationships much better than JKR, it's at least believable.

This is pretty good, you're setting things up nicely for the second chapter.

Um...I like the direction you've taken with the story, but your writing is too plain, too straight-forward. Like Hermione talking to Hagrid, or Hagrid crying and rolling all over the ground. Or Ginny talking about the 'Phlegm,' talking with Hermione, SMILING when refering to the Chamber of Secrets. Ginny shouldn't be smiling when refering to the latter. It wasn't a happy time for her so I don't think she should be smiling when thinking of that incident.

All I'm saying is, is that your story is really good, or the direction your taking it is good; you just need to pretty it up a bit, ya know?

~~Akumako_Ronso

*nods head* I think this is a good story... you should write a longer chapter... please?

I think you've got a nice story line developing here, so let me just say this. I've seen some of your reviews that say: 'slow down' and 'a little more detail would be nice.' Please don't take this the wrong way, but I think they have a point. For example, when Ginny goes into Hermione's room and finds her crying, Hermione immediately confesses its because of Dumbledore and asks Ginny what everyone is going to do now. (paraphrased)

Its not that this is unnecessary or anything, but your pace here is frantic (just less than a minute earlier Ginny was getting dressed and now Hermione is pouring her heart out to her? It's just a little rushed is all. This isn't to say you don't have a good fic developing here, it's just that a little time spent on the detail of surroundings and such in between the dislogue would just improve your fic all the more.

I don't yet write fic for HP, but I've written fanfic for Alias. I know it can be tough to even write sometimes, so please don't let this discourage you - that's not what I'm trying to do. Just take the time to refine your fic and add details and the like. I had the best luck with my fanfic when I had a beta - a GOOD beta, one that actually suggests changes instead of just a 'great fic!' reply to all your fics.

Looking forward to more.

not bad. its a bit quick past, slow it down abit.
other then that its not bad.

So far so good!!!!

It could be the start of a very good story. I wish the chapters were longer........

Update soon

its okay not too many details cant wait till u post the next one

it is an interesting concept I hope I woll enjoy the way you fallow through with it. Looking forward to the next chapter.

looks like a good story sofar. I look forward to your next chapters

please update as soon as possible. i cant wiat to see what happens next.