wow that was the worst fing story ive ever read........i mean hermione would never say anything like that duhhhhh you dont know harry potter at all

The writing is stilted, awkward. You hurried to your conclusion, no build-up. No matter, this is one of your early fics so I assume you've improved so much by now

That was lovely and there was some humor in the beginning too

“Fancy a nice shag with me then?”

Hermione simply stared at him, and then a wicked smile crept across her delicate face.

“Mmmm yes, very, very much.”

Brilliant work!

This was not the best one iv read, but it is very good but needs 2 b a bit longer!!!


blondie and brunet XXX slash

I found this story amazin,and can't wait for my a first time!!!!Its really sweet but can u plz finish it 4 me???

Cute one shotter. Good Lemon. Did I already say that you are good at this? Can't wait to read more of your stuff!

hpw

You write such fabulous stories. Definitely one of my new fav authors. Great story. I love how straight to the point Hermione is. Keep writing!

a very good build up

the sex scene is good but the climax could have been better less letters and words!

but otherwise v good keep up the good work

L.I.A.N.G

wwo hermione saying mas.... well its so out of my mind i think it got me off guard but i really like it cause it truely is harry and hermione they are honest with each other no matter what and sice im a delusional i dont give a damme abot the rest and i like it

I loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved It

P.S.: I added u 2 my fav author & story list !

thats really really good. It just kinda jumps to where thery are having sez though. U should do a little more build up.

What can I say? This is my type of story. Nice Job. I loved this story. is no better ship than H/Hr

Wow. So good. Luv H/H . Too good for words.
I love the way a bit of each character was able to shine through, which made it very believable.

um... a little short... like usually I have the problem with a hecka lotta forplay and then like.. they fucked.. the end... but you were like zero foreplay plus they fucked.. the end... and yes, though its nice to say it hurts her the first time for class, it doesnt hurt all girls.. and girls (sorry boys) hardly ever cum while having sex, let alone their first time! but the humor in the begining was awesome, I loved it (fancy a nice shag?) so all in all, the writing was amazing, just could have done with a little more.. sex

hmmm... i guess that was an interesting one shot.. just a thought of the moment thing, i'm assuming... but it was good.