AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 18/01/07
humourous...not bad made me smile on n otherise boring day!keep it up!!! |
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Wow. That was hilarious. You're a fantastic writer... This is one of my all-time fave L/J stories... Good job, luff. Can't wait for the nevt fic!!
Pour toujours |
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Leah CarSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/04/06
good.
'Lily was having a great time. She was spending time with her three best friends; James, Sirius and Remus, and life seemed to be going great.
And then in came Aleerah. Stealing the show. Booting Lily out of her position as the confidante, the girl in the group, and most importantly, James's best friend.
That was all gone.
Aleerah was James's girlfriend. In fact, she'd destroyed Lily's place in their circle of friends. She'd turned Remus and Sirius against Lily by spreading lies, and they all thought this blonde was an innocent angel. They turned against Lily.
Nobody gave her a second chance, or a say in the matter.
Lily started spending time to herself. James didn't understand why she wasn't spending time with them anymore. He thought she didn't like Aleerah.
Basically, he thought Lily was jealous, and it was her fault she was staying away from them; not that it was the fault of his other three companions. ' so insiteful.
'Meanwhile, Aleerah entered the bathroom. She hurried over to the mirror and started fixing her makeup. Then she rolled up the left sleeve of her wedding dress and looked down at the skull.
What? Even Death Eaters are allowed to cry sometimes' nice twist
this was good. keep writing! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 27/03/06
they crash his wedding, make up from a huge fight, have their first kiss, get engaged, and get married all in one day. me thinks the relationship is moving a bit fast. |
Author Feedback: Ah, they lost time not being together...*grins sheepishly*
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rotfl, NO, i was saying that i didn't really like the lily bashing that much!  |
Author Feedback: Oops, sorry--I misread your review...hehe...I ommitted a few words...*apologises*
ly,
x Cazzy x |
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ROTFL. I loved reading that. not so much that i loved the lily-bashing by whatever the heck her name was (i was actually hoping thats someone would show up and blow her up, but whatever) but... yeah, you were *not* lying when you were talking about the fake hair and everything. i laughed so hard at the end when they had their lily "fake hair color" conversation (especially when i realized, 'hey, aren't they still in the church?' lol) awesome job |
Author Feedback: lol I forgot they were still in the church!! Everyone could hear them...hehe...*blushes*
I love that clip. Rocks. I edited it...
Aleerah, eheh...made that name up, lol...yeah, it would be fun if someone blew her up. But DEs could get killed always, so we can assume she dies in the future...why'd ya like the Lily-bashing, though?? *grins* Weird...
Thanks bunches for the review,
ly,
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 04/11/05
Very strange. Interesting, and I did have a problem with the whole give your next girlfriend the same ring as your previous fiancee thing, but it was okay. Also, how can a group of friends who were supposed to be super close fall apart because some outsider told them a couple of lies? Why were they so willing to give up on Lily? I don't know, it all just seems so rushed. I do think it can be improved, though. |
Author Feedback: That has happened with my group. We were all together, this girl came along, said a load of stuff about me, and they agreed and I've been abandoned. We WERE super close in a way, too. And I guess they must have been willing to give up on me.
What's odd is that I wrote this story over a year before that...
The ring...yeah, that's all he had on him, and he wanted to do it quickly before he lost his nerve. Her wedding ring will be different. The fact that it has a stone on it (the wedding ring) is because Aleerah likes money and wanted it. I know that wedding rings are usually plain...
It probably can be improved. I don't think I'll rewrite it, though. I wrote it a while ago, and I'm fine with the way it turned out...
Thanks!
x Cazzy x |
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WongUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 23/10/05
Mint story just one tiny little insignificant thing wedding rings are solid aint they? Only enagement rings have precious stones probaly wrong but mint story  |
Author Feedback: You're probably right but oh well ^_^ I like my story and I like gems so hey ^_^
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/09/05
Why do you people only make one chapter!? For God's sake, makeanother chapter!!!!!!!! |
Author Feedback: *grins* It's a one-shot...but the story is kinda continued in Angels Versus Devils...
Thanks,
x Cazzy x |
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dificultUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 18/08/05
Wow, another twist to one of your amazing stories! great job. |
Author Feedback: lol thanks!! ^_^
x Cazzy x |
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I love this story!Now I have to read your other ones.*goes to read other stories* |
Author Feedback: Yay! Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Cazzy
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sarahmaySigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 11/06/05
First let me say...I really like the idea you're going with for this...but it personally felt really rushed.(chapters would be better...more backround) And the parts about how James, Sirius, and Remus just dropped her - well, I just don't think that would happen...
Anyways - I enjoyed the whole idea and besides the few things I didn't agree with, I think you did a nice job! Keep it up!
sarah |
Author Feedback: lol, my good one-shot days went when I lost all my files (they were deleted from ff net, and then my PC got wiped). This is one of the first things I wrote since then. I don't believe my writing will ever be as good as my one-shot that I forgot the name of, or The Inseperables (well, I remembered that one...).
It probably wouldn't have, but Remus is precious about his werewolf state, and Sirius really hates Regulus and hates everybody who associates with him. James, I guess, probably wouldn't have fallen out with her just because of her 'lying', I admit, but he was feeling upset at that minute and thought she hated him. He learnt in time...
Thanks!
Cazzy
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hah your story had me laughing ( not in a bad way it was quite good) i loved that last line about the roots , |
Author Feedback: Me too...Hehe! Thanks!
Cazzy
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I knew she was a death eater!!! Especially when I read this:
"Aleerah scratched at her left forearm and muttered in annoyance."
I was like DEATH EATER ALERT! Hehe... I love the way you made all three of the bridesmaids' names start with A. I don't know why that particularly hit me.
I loved also the way Lily and James flirt at the end, when he is just about to propose to her.
Nice job! |
Author Feedback: lol I know--I didn't want it to just hit you automatically, I wanted readers to notice...though you seem to be the first person to pick up on it! Thanks so much!
Cazzy
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