Constant vigilance to this story! I can hear Hermione speaking to me, you are channeling her spirit better than JKR ever could. Oh - and nice snog.

I am favoriting this story, and you too. You are incredible. 'Nuff said.

That is totally Hermione's voice coming from this story. That is exactly what Hermione would do. She's my favorite character, so thank you for making her so real.

Hmm...this is psychological, for me. It's like 'this makes perfect sense' and 'WTF?' at the same time. I suppose that's how it's supposed to be.

-- Sage

Intersting Logic! But I can picture Hermione's mind working similary to this.

That was great. Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.

Great story so far. I loved the way that it is written. I can't wait to read the rest. Good job.

like the person before me said... ignore the flames (but i havent seen one yet.... all of them were good ones)...and have fun with your senior year monica!!!...lol.. but also... continue with on toward morning.. if you still want.. i can help with some ideas.. .(like i have in the past ^_^) my merlin thing was pretty accurate.. i guess.... allright... i think i wrote a long enough review... umm... i like this monologue.. very touching.. you got hermiones personality very well.. keep up the good work!!!

well, that was... interesting

i don't really know what to say, that's a new kinda style for me

it was still well written though mate, and i enjoyed reading it

keep up the awesome work, and lets get some OTM goin eh? hahhaahha

pz

Josh

Awesome, awesome Monica!! I will love reading this one and seeing where it goes!

This tore at my heart. You made Herminoe's pain so real, I never thought about how Cedric's death would affect her, but of course it would be devestating. Mr. Weasley her second dad, very touching. I liked how you kept enphasing that people were killed, murdered not just died. I liked your idea that she protect herself with logic. Really good job.

Very nice piece here--I love internal monologues, but so few get Hermione's voice and emotions right. You've done a superb job with that. The heart/mind conflict is pulled off quite well. The black ink/color analogy worked especially well with Hermione's character. Keep up the nice work.

Excellent job on your experiment here. I tend myself to write in stream-of-con style quite a bit when doing dialogue based fictional writing. A somewhat suprising, yet not entirely suprising way for hermione or really anyone involved in a war to turn to. Survival. Kudos!

Absolutely wonderful take on Hermione and I believe that she could really go there, take logic as the safer course, the necessary one.

Though, her true problem is when the war is over... when she has to accept, to heal.

Definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

this is very intriuging.. looking forward to part two. i don't blame her either.. eventually you just have to shut your self out or be tortured by the sorrow.. i'd guess..