Another amazingly different analogy, Ama. I never would have thought of it.

I love your portrayal of this relationship that I love so much. It's my favorite portrayal, as a matter of fact. It's not filled with flowery words or grand gestures, but by total and complete togetherness - without all that fluff. Togetherness that transcends everything else. With your writing, the little things speak volumes. The shirt that she's balling up in her hands. The pulse point. The reason they asked not to be partnered together.

Sorry it took me so long to read and review. I love all of your work and if I don't review it, then you know I somehow missed it. Feel free to remind me!

I guess I was wrong about chapter 5 of voiceless. I forgot about the prologue, so I got confused. Oh well, I have something else to look forward to now.

Thanks for another brilliant short story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

jane

This was very, very nice. Your opening paragraph was elegant, and the emotion deep and convincing.

If you'll forgive me, you had a little narrative voice issue in the opening, but it smoothed out.

I enjoyed this piece very much.

Great story (Should have known that wrote it!) I'm off now to read Voiceless Chapter 4--can't wait.

The repetition at the end about the comma makes a great ending. Thumbs up!

Wow. That was really really good. I love the way you write and the images it brings to mind.

Oh... Beautiful, so breathtakingly beautiful... this wonderful metaphor, stretched between 'These spaces that she normally speeds past, between paragraphs, punctuation, letters; between the end of a sentence and the beginning of another, these hushed spaces are suddenly the only things she can see' and 'There is still is an hour or so before day breaks properly with all its noises, but the muteness inside the house has vanished. She can hear it breathing', and suddenly everything is alright with the world, 'her absent palm pressing on his heartbeat' and 'his world filling up with her'... Loved it how she couldn't stand silence and darkness while he was away, how she kept clinging to his shirt, 'mauled and soiled from being dragged around the house for days '. Just a little detail, but speaking volumes...

Do you even realize how gifted you are? You do such incredible thing with the language, finding new, unexpected and fascinating ways to say the things that've been said so many times before, picturing the strongest of emotions with soft contours and pastels, so much said in whisper yet having the power of an earthquake. Incredible, just incredible and I'm so grateful you posted this to make waiting for the next part of 'Voiceless' easier for us.

Like you said, nothing's simple and given once and for ever, 'The only thing you can do is speed past them, try not to think about them and just be glad when they are over'... Nothing's simple but there's happiness for them. It's all but easy but it's still happiness. Please do keep sharing your talent with us.

I love all your works! Such great imagery, the dreaded long wait, the unnoticed coming... Great metaphor for the punctuations.

It was quite endearing that Hermione holds onto Harry's old shirt when he's not around. Great post-Hogwarts stories, really!

Nel

Between this and Voiceless, you have me completely enamoured. I loved it. Such a simple thing you've made into something so meaningful and true. It's just beautiful.

Your ways with imagery are remarkable and paint such wonderful pictures of waiting, urgency, refrain, etc. That's what makes it so moving. Lovely work.

Wow! Another fantastic snippet into the lives of Harry and Hermione. I can understand why they wouldn't want to be partners, but I can also understand Hermione's deep concern leading to insomnia. But that's what comes from love.

And what a beautiful metaphor for the comma. Really gives them a whole new meaning.

Excellent work!

Heya...

I've always admired your style of writing. The way you can pull me into your story from the very beginning. Using a comma to describe something is unheard before, and you pulled it off. It makes sense to compare what a comma is to Hermione's feeling/situation at the time.

The romantic in me sigh when Harry finally gets home and Hermione just comfort him. Its such a simple, cozy picture that you made out of the two of them; two lovers finding home within each other. But that simple gesture, Hermione or Harry holding the other, spoke of a language that all being understood. I could relate, and other people too, to that feeling of content when someone you love finally holds you after weeks apart.

Great ficlet.

bo-

Very beautiful. I truly loved it! Then again, I truly love commas...I guess that makes me a bit nerdy. Either way, thanks for the great read!

-Scooter

Great chapter! Very detailed. Enjoyed reading it and am looking forward to reading more of your work. Lady Chancellor

Wow, I read this and was stunned. All of your writing is much like this. You take something like an unimportant comma, and write an entire passage about its significance and how it applies to what Hermione and Harry are thinking. It really is quite amazing.

Amazing job on this and all of your other fabulous fanfics!!

Jae

This is a fabulously written piece! The way everything ties together is especially satisfying, and even amazing, as a reader. You write incredibly well and I hope to read if not more to this than other works by you in future! Keep it up; it's really very captivating the way you write.

wow....that was a really really good story....u definitely have a great gift for writing....that was beautiful! keep writing cuz ur really good writer....wow....keep up the good work!