quizgirlSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/04/05
Hmmm.... I haven't thought about that before... Intersting twist in the end.
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Author Feedback: Glad you liked it! Yeah, I think it's eminently possible that Cho was trying to do more than make Harry jealous... she had to know how mention of Cedric would hurt him.
Be well... Paracelsus. |
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KenSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/04/05
 That was very well done, I enjoyed reading this a lot. Thank you! Those were definitely not what I would have imagined Hermione thinking at that scene, but most of it sounds very believeable, I particularly like how Hermione was trying to make Harry happy, and that she was aware of her bossiness. The little signs of pining also had my inner shipper squeeing but personally, I think she was just trying to be a good friend.
Thanks again! Hope to read more of your writing soon. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for the kind words, Ken. I think this scene's the point in OotP at which Hermione really regrets her plan to get Harry and Cho together... but decides to stick with it anyway, no matter how much she'd prefer otherwise. Oh, the inner conflict... 
Take care, and have a good week. -- Paracelsus. |
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Jane DoeUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/04/05
That was really interesting (in a good way)! I say that because I have always had a different interpretation of Hermione's motivations during that scene. I think she was fishing for reassurance that she was still important to Harry despite Cho the interloper, which is why she threw the "You should have told her you thought I was ugly." comment in there. I think she wanted Harry to automatically say he didn't think she was ugly (because let's face it even if Hermione isn't a Beauty Queen, she isn't a Dog, either, so to call her "ugly" is overstating it!), so it would confirm that she still mattered to him. That's my take on it, anyway, but it was very interesting to read yours! Well done! |
Author Feedback: ("Interesting" in a good way? As opposed to "interesting" like Ron's perfume? Oh good. )
I've heard that theory proposed, that Hermione was fishing for reassurance. (Not "fishing for a compliment", because it's been amply demonstrated that Hermione doesn't care all that much about her physical appearance.) She does have her moments of self-doubt. But seeing that Harry, at her request and without being told why, broke off a date with a girl he'd been crushing for two years -- well, that says a lot about Hermione's importance to Harry.
I'm glad the story worked for you, though. Thank you very much for reviewing!
-- Paracelsus |
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*Raises an eyebrow.*
Hermione *does* keep her thoughts so very well hidden.
*Lowers eyebrow.*
Which makes this such a fascinating story to read (this and "Half an Hour"), because of the effort to go behind the interested, excited mien of Hermione Jane Granger and try to understand what she actually feels and thinks in certain key, "shippy" moments of OotP.
I find myself agreeing with your interpretation of Hermione--and her reactions, thoughts and ideas to what she sees happening around her.
I do agree with your view that she was consciously 'setting up' Harry and Cho--no ulterior motives on her part, she was--and *is*--fulfilling the "role" she thinks she has to play: best friend, loyal sidekick, faithful companion.
No matter how painful it is to her... no matter how it tears her heart apart.
Because that is her "role."
One thing which recently struck me.
The end of GoF had Hermione doing 'something she had never done before, and kissed (Harry) on the cheek.' This was a key element in the fandom speculations during the build-up to OotP: how will Hermione react?
But there did not seem to be *anything* in OotP (except for the subsequent cheek kiss to Ron).
Unless... one considers Hermione's reaction when Harry finally shows up at Grimmauld Place. To my mind, I think she was letting her feelings all hang out then--but Harry was too angry, confused and scared of the Ministry hearing to really notice.
And Hermione went back to her best friend/ faithful companion/loyal sidekick mode.
Which may explain her actions and reactions to the two incidents that you've portrayed so far... which is why your stories sound so believable and credible to me. 
Looking forward to more from you, my friend.
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Author Feedback: Yay! Good to hear from you, gil! And thank you for your kind words... and your concurrence on my theory. Yes, I think that Hermione's feelings were very much as you described. When she first hugged Harry at Grimmauld Place, the entire book would have been changed radically if he'd showed the slightest warmth in return... but at that point, he was too angry, too upset, to show Hermione any encouragement. And by the time he might have done so, she'd retreated back into her "best friend, gotta support Harry" mode.
And she's fooled herself into believing this. Right up to the point when Harry has his first kiss -- and it isn't with her. And his first date -- and it isn't with her. And now it's becoming harder and harder for her to maintain her self-assigned role. Can't wait to read HBP -- and see whether she breaks out of the mold. (Yeah!)
Thank you again, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed this.
Until later -- Bruce. |
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SarmiSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/04/05
It's good, but I think Hermione's character is off in certain places. So, it could definitely be better. |
Author Feedback: Thank you! If you could spare a moment, could you e-mail me and tell me where I missed? I'd appreciate it... honest.
This scene was harder to write than the one I did for "Half an Hour." I mean, it's always seemed out of character for Hermione to do a post-mortem on Harry's date, when it's too late to do anything about it. But if we assume that Hermione, originally trying to get Harry and Cho together, is now having second thoughts -- but still wants to be a supportive friend to Harry -- then the scene begins to make a bit more sense. That, at least, is my spin on it.
Thank you again for reviewing, Sarmi. I appreciate any and all comments. Until later -- Paracelsus. |
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Okay, so you know you must do this for all the important bits of ootp, and thusly I will be able to get through it again. And all will be well. *nods*
I really enjoyed this. It's always so fun to speculate on what other characters might be thinking, and of course I liked what Hermione's thinking here! And oh, I very much liked that Hermione's inner voice was funny. Yay for sense-of-humor!Hermione!
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Author Feedback: MC, if I have to write the "Hermione Granger version" of OotP to get you to read it... well, just bear in mind that it took Jo Rowling four years to write the Harry Potter version, and she could work at it full time.
(And besides, most of the rest of the book speaks for itself. How could a HG-view of, say, the battle at the Department of Mysteries improve on the original? "Okay, Silencing Charm on Dolohov... ooh, good Body Bind, Harry! -- OUCH." Short scene there. )
I think smarts and humor often go together. So I think Hermione is funny on the inside, but is too self-conscious to actually make jokes. (She does so *very* rarely in canon.) And yeah, when it involves something besides schoolwork, Hermione can be quite self-conscious.
But the most important thing is that you enjoyed this! It *is* fun seeing canon from someone's PoV besides Harry's, isn't it?
Hope to hear from you soon, MC. Be ever well. -- Paracelsus. |
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AlorkinSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/04/05
Hermione would have done well in Slytherrin. Her world-view is very well focused, but she has the need to always be right, and is willing to go to any lenghts to do so. The problem now, is what to do, now she realizes Harry might not be meant for Cho. Alorkin |
Author Feedback: Hmmm, yes, Hermione would have done well in Slytherin. She does have an ambitious side: she needs to excel, she needs to be right. (Possibly because, until she made friends with Harry and Ron, her entire self-image was based on knowing books.) That's going to have to change, or at least be softened, if she's to continue to grow. And then, the "problem" of what to do with Harry and Cho will have an obvious answer. (So I hope, anyway!)
Thank you for your review, Alorkin. Take care...
-- Paracelsus. |
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ugen64Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/04/05
Brilliant! With the emotions, and using the canon dialogue, and such - brilliant! You should write more - a lot more |
Author Feedback: Well, I have written more, but it's over on FictionAlley. Be it known that this is the first story I've written specifically for Portkey. I don't intend that it should be the last!
Thank you again. |
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Very nicely done scene, always a highly debated one between H/Hr and R/Hr shippers.
I really liked how you handled her realization and her stream of conciousness. |
Author Feedback: Hermione's brain works a lot faster than most people's, I suspect. I can give her quite the details stream of consciousness.
You're right that this scene has engendered a lot of shipping debate. By itself, on the surface, it doesn't appear to support H/Hr. But put it in context and look below the surface, and things change. That's the thought that prompted me to write Hermione's viewpoint.
Thank you for reviewing. Be well.
-- Paracelsus. |
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I really like this. Seems like an excellent interpretation of what Hermione might have been thinking during those scenes. Very enjoyable! |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you enjoyed it! That's the main point of writing... Thank you very much for reviewing; it made my day!
-- P. |
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wyadraSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/04/05
hey,
pretty neat little story there. the funny thing was this was how i actually originally interpreted the book as i've always thought that H/Hr would end up together. But many arguments with lots of others made me think my interpretation was wrong.
Now, i see someone else with the same..... Yippee!
It may be wishful thinking, or it may be insight, but i really liked it. |
Author Feedback: Glad you liked it. Yeah, there's been a lot of arguments about Hermione's actions throughout OotP. In the final analysis, though, we see Hermione supporting Harry getting with Cho in the first part of the book -- right up to the Kiss Analysis scene -- and thereafter being much less enthusiastic about them. This (and my other story, Half an Hour) are my interpretation of her actions.
It may be wishful thinking, but I'm a wishful kind of guy.
Be well, and thank you for the review! -- Paracelsus. |
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Wonderfully well done. I enjoy these little windows into Hermione's mind since the books are almost entirely from Harry's perspective.
Thanks |
Author Feedback: Quite welcome. It's a problem I have with Jo's otherwise fine writing: I want more than Harry's PoV, darn it. (On the other hand, that's why God made fanfiction.) 
Thanks for reviewing. I appreciate it! |
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BingblotSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/04/05
Yay!!!! I'm so glad you've written this!!! And brilliantly too. I love Hermione's thoughts about Cho and her insisting to herself that she just needs to be Harry's best friend. Also love her thinking that all she wants is for Harry to be happy, no matter what it takes.
(Much better than my own attempt at writing Hermione's PoV of this scene, more power to your quill.) |
Author Feedback: Wow. Thanks so much! (Now I'll have to return the favor and read your spin on this scene...)
I do believe that Hermione's feelings for Harry were evolving all through OotP. And at this point in the book, she's having to tell herself *very firmly* that they're still just friends. And she isn't believing it any more...
Can't wait for Book 6! -- P. |
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AriannaUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/04/05
Your story was really perfect! I think you really read Hermione's reactions in the rightest way!It was brilliant and funny, hope you'll go on writing/interpreting other scenes from HP books, OotP in particular, you are really good! Be sure I'll be there reading them!
Hugs
Arianna |
Author Feedback: Well, thank you! I'm glad you like my take on Hermione's thoughts here. Rest assured I'll continue to write, though I may branch out from interpreting the Sacred Texts.
Appreciate the review *and* the hugs.... -- Paracelsus. |
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