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i like this fic...it's different becasue Ginny's not this bitch and although I'm not a fan of hers, it's nice to see her in a new light |
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wafballSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 27/05/06
This is so different from other stories I've read - very angsty, yet quite realistic.
I loved the way you showed everyone's different points of view and the ending was appropriate. Not over the top or fluffy, but still quite sweet.
I really enjoyed this piece, hope you keep writing. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 30/08/05
Really well done. I was curious after the first chapter as to how you were going to end up with H/Hr but you pulled it off. Despite your A/N, I thought you captured Ginny's personality well. My only gripe (very very minor) is that Ron never thought about the consequences of dating one of his best friends (ie. Would it wreck their friendship or what if Harry has feelings for her). Again I really enjoyed it. |
Author Feedback: I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. 
Yes, I had given so much a thought about Ron considering what would be the repercussions of dating a best friend. But then, he had a thing for Hermione for years, and let's face it he has a sensitivity of a 'blunt axe'. He's not Harry who would give a thought about what Ron or the Weasleys would feel if he dates Ginny.
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Ok i did like the chapter but at the same time i didn't. Greatly written, a great way to put the four POV together. I didn't like it because a smal part of me though knowing how this will end (we are in Portkey after all) I just can't stand OBHWF |
Author Feedback: You are not alone on this one. You just gave me one of the expected reactions from Portkey readers for this chapter.
You don't know how much I hated writing this chapter, but I guess it needs to done.
Before, I'm not really sure why I wanted to get this whole thing posted before HBP comes out, but now after reading that sixth book I know why. I'm in a way right that these pairings will happen in Book 6, even though my stomach churned with the thought of it.
So if you're revolted with this chapter, I'm pretty sure that while reading HBP you wanted to chunk it out (or if you haven't yet, I'm sorry for the spoiler.) 
Keep on reading, because the next two chapters are what I dearly hope would happen to those canon pairings.
Still H/HR and still rowing this sunken ship,
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JanieBSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 17/07/05
Hello there.
I finished HBP this morning. Only just now checked my email and found your replies. Re-reading my reviews from the time before I'd read HBP makes me a little sad. I've been in and out of Portkey all day as I'm sure many have - left reviews and read reviews...*sigh* I truly don't get it. JKR said there was "a little romance" for Harry - hell's bells!! That was "little"??? There was more romance in HBP than in some fanfics!!!! Anyways, I'm an optimist. And there's one more book. Soldier on!
Cheers,
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JanieBSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 15/07/05
*Huge sigh of relief* It's so nice to arrive where you know you want to be!! I virtually never read angsty stories (I am so NOT an angsty person!) and yet your story has managed to very nicely kill a little more of the last few hours before I can rush out and buy HBP - thank you!
xxxx Lady Jane xxxx |
Author Feedback: Thanks for reading.
Somehow I still have that hopeful feeling that i would have that *huge sigh of relief* when I finished reading the very last book.
Hope you'll enjoy reading HBP  |
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JanieBSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 15/07/05
Ah ha! Bravery is rewarded! The world is slowly turning the right way up again...
You know, when I realised Ron was there, listening, I went back and re-read Harry and Hermione's conversation as it puts a different light on it knowing Ron was there. And so, to Chapter 3!
xxxx Lady Jane xxxx |
Author Feedback: Gee! How much I wished these things really happened in canon.
Why, JKR? Tell me, why... |
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JanieBSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 15/07/05
Oh dear. I'm being very brave here because you've made Ron & Hermione's initial tete-a-tete, as well as Harry & Ginny's, so sweetly tentative (as they often are at that age) they seem TOO real!!! Urk! (God help us all if JKR even so much as HINTS at either of these ships!!) Anyway, as you say, this IS Portkey so I'm hitching up my Gryffindor bravery and heading off to Chapter Two...
xxxx Lady Jane xxxx
PS I had to smile when I read your bio - I, too, can say that I am a "desperate wife - NOT housewife"! (I'm a forty something, full time working mother of two who is totally in love with JKR's world!) |
Author Feedback: You're reading fanfiction while waiting for HBP?
I just finished reading HBP, and I'm a bit sad right now. 
God help us! Yes, please. I was hoping for this pai- ups to happen in book 6. I knew this would be a hard chapter for H/Hr shippers. However, I never thought that while reading canon, I would somehow lose my Gryffindor nerve. |
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"People have a way with dreaming and believing and inventing words like forever." - That line really stood out to me for some reason. I liked it. This was a very moving chapter- everyone (well, ok, the Weasleys) are so messed up! I'm glad to see that Ron's jealousy didn't drive him to break his friendship with Hermione. That was nice. I liked this fic- it was very sweet and well written! |
Author Feedback: Glad you liked that line, it's the human's way of trying to beat mortality and we're often fooled by our ownselves in believing that everything are quite alright.
In the books, I do hope Ron's jealousy won't drive him into doing something despicable. Oh, I *do* hope so because if he does, that'll be the breakingpoint, the axis of the battle between Harry and Voldemort. 
Thanks for finding this sweet and saying that it's well written. 
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Aww... what a sad chapter! Everyone's so miserable... but I Guess that's the point! Poor Ron, but at the same time- if he wasn't such a jealous prat he wouldn't have had to go to bed with Hermione mad at him. The little bit at the end with him in the invisibility cloak is a nice touch. I like Ginny's thoughts 'Harry will haunt me forever'... very nice! |
Author Feedback: Well, each chapter has it's own theme: for the first, make them feel the joys of falling in love, for the second, make them worry and suffer, and for the last, make them feel the anguish of losing the that love.
That's Ron, actually; he's got real issues when it comes to jealousy. I gave him an extra view in the end 'cause I love to torture him.
I think, I actually gave Ginny and Ron far better thoughts than Harry and Hermione.
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Hey there! I've been meaning to review this for some time now. I really like this fic. I like reading the different points of view and the love hexagon? octagon? something-agon that's going on between the charactars. It's nice to see a fic where something more is going on than just Harry and Hermione and all of the characters feelings are considered equally. Nicely done! |
Author Feedback: Oh, I've been waiting for this from you.
That's the whole point of this fic actually, capture each character's emotions and thoughts.
Nel |
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ugen64Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 24/04/05
Your language is beautiful, and the story is very good, but the characters don't talk as realistically as they could (I doubt, for instance, Harry would say that sentence about the "teardrops"). Tone down the complex language a bit, and your stories will be brilliant |
Author Feedback: Thanks.
Like what I have said in the A/N for both chapters 1 and 2, I'll be diverting these characters from canon, knowing full well the thoughts and words that'll be coming from them.
In my other stories they don't talk like that, I assure you.
This is the story where I took the liberty to be a bit adventurous and used flowery words and go a bit deeper.
Nel |
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AlorkinSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 22/04/05
Very touching. A bitter pill for Ron to swallow, and yet, swallow he does. I've felt that pain before. I know how he feels, but he was right. Hermione was meant for Harry, ahd he for her. Alorkin |
Author Feedback: I know, in a way, that a lot of people had gone through what Ron went through in this story. I had.
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AlorkinSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 22/04/05
Ron is showing a surprising amount of maturity, backing away from a love he knows will never be whole. I'm rather surprised at this, as even in canon, he's shown as a shallow, if loyal person. Alorkin |
Author Feedback: I know, like what I have said in the first chapter, characters could be veering away from their nature based on canon.
I love Ron, he's the ultimate guy friend. Shallow, he might be and little bit childish, but sometime, somehow I know he would change. That will be his journey in the HP adventure. |
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Good story overall. The characters seem a little too sentimental and how they talk makes them seem older than they really are-- especially Harry and Ron, because they usually talk just "simple, no-big words" English. However, you seemed to pinpoint their emotions exactly according to the situation, so the story turned out pretty good. Keep writing! |
Author Feedback: Well, I knew right away that the characters would turn OOC even before I started writing everything down (that's why I apologized in the A/N that I would be doing so). Actually, the musings came to me first before I had a story. So, I wrote one passage at a time, and they don't come to me in a constructed way. Before long, I had these sets of angsty passages, and then I decided to create one story to tie them all together.
I wanted to present the teen's flawed outlook of love and romance, but to use the character's current way with words, it wouldn't look good - a bit shallow, lacking. That is why I had to present them in the past tense, which I hope I did properly.
Glad you liked it.
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