Really nice. Strange that I've only come across it now...

I'm just curious, but was that Hermione's first time? I don't think so because she didn't even wince in pain? Who else did she sleep with then?? Was it Harry's first time? They hit the bed pretty quickly don't you think?

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Regardless though, It's well written.

Cute, very cute, even if i'm not sure they will go soo fast from a first kiss to making love.
But, as i think that H/Hr, R/L, D/G ... (or even, be warned, i'm going to say it, R/Hr) are more a fleet than single ships everyone can go everywhere
Bye

How did I miss this one? It was posted on my birthday!! I really enjoyed it. Your love scene is precisely what I like to read. I believe you wrote it beautilfully - conveying the intimacy of the moment without gritty details. Well done!

I loved , I knew they look good and excellent! So does Emma Watson and Daniel Radcliffe. Right!
If you agree, Can you make a romance story too?!

I loved , I knew they look good and excellent! So does Emma Watson and Daniel Radcliffe. Right!

It sucked!!! i would hardly call it a love scene at all. my god, that was probably the most boring waste of time fan-fic i've ever read. sorry but ur story was horrible.

OMG GREAT

You did that wonderfully, I didn't even feel like it was rushed too much. Well, actually the 'making love' was a bit of a shock but it felt right with the story. It happened just as I had imagined it. Perfect.

it was a little brief for my liking (but hey thats just personal preferance) aside from that i thought you wrote the whole making love thing really well. you wrote out what you wanted really well, its a well written piece

you did a abso-bloody-lutelt wonderful job whatever it was you were aiming for! I loved this! so in tune with the way "my harry" is? *lol* keep writing!!!

pretty darn good if u ask me keep wrriting ur pretty good at it

Great Great story. I feel like crying with happyness. This story had my heart pumping faster. Very good work. I love the Harry and Hermione stories.

It sucked! if ur gonna write a love story, u could at least be more descriptive so thats its less confusing to read.

good job i cant wait to read ur other work i will definatly look into

That was a great one shot! I love that Hermione was the agressor, but in a gentle way. The storm outside mirroring their passion was a great touch as well!

even though the scene seemed a bit sudden, the actualy love scene was beautiful! it made me cry it was just gorgeous...now if you incorporate that into one of ur stories that would make it even better