thats it? she wasnt even upset when he told her about the prophecy!!! but....i guess that it was still good

Aw~~~ that was very sweet.

Short, but sweet.

And very adorable too! ^___^

~Eli

pretty good start hope its a good finish just like ur other story the Sword of godric

That was good. But the end seem really rushed. It could have used some troubled thoughts and maybe a few angry words to add length to Harry's confession. But other than that it was good.

Awwww!!! That was so cute, and mighty bold of Hermione. I really enjoyed this story!! Keep it up!! Take care.

i like the story line, but you gotta put more depth into it. the end is like, oh yeah. i just told you i love you, so ill stop separating myself from you now. sorry thats rather boring. you have the beginnings of a great angslt / fluff piece, so use it!

I hope you continue to write more, you have good potential with your writing. This story started out very well, overall it was a good story, you just seemed to lose a little steam at the end and it was too abrupt an ending. But keep writing, it gets easier and reviews help you to know what works and what doesn't. I liked your H/Hr characterization, Harry seemed especially real. Good job, really!
hammergal

Nice little story, though it seemed a little quick, especially on the emotional level. I think that Harry went too quickly from being reticent to telling her everything.

Keep writing though, this is a great start!

ok...so what happened to "I can't tell her because then she'll be even more at risk"?

I like that they can admit their feelings to eachother & I like that theere was snogging, but I have problems with the 'I Love You/light-switch effect'. By that I mean that as soon as one says that they love the other they are magically happy and together. I don't think every story needs a heaping helping of angst and heartache, but I think that it's a lot better when they actually discuss their fears and reassure eachother. Something like "I'm scared Voldy will really want to kill you if you're my girlfriend" followed by "but Harry, he already is going to be after me for what I am & the fact of what I did in the Department of Mysteries to his Death Eaters, so don't think it's all about you" followed by "But I'm scared of losing you, Ron too, you're all I have left. If you died I don't know how I could go on" and so on and so on. It feels more 'realistic' (which is a problematic term when you're discussing the love life of fictional characters, I know, but never-the-less) if they talk about things. Hermione, I think we can all agree, is a talker - she'll want to get everything out in the open, analyze it and find a solution. Harry is the king of internalization and guilt, but Hermione seems to always be able to draw him out.

Just my $0.02

This was pretty good, a few grammar mistakes, but really well written! Please write more stories soon!