i don\'t like it srry but u could have done a better job  i almost fell asleep  |
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hagridSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 29/05/07
A great little piece of insight. Who better to understand than our 'Ermione. And Ron, don't even get me started on that one... He who cares more for death rat eaters, no, I mean, death eater rats, yeh, thats it, anyway, he cared more fer that rat than his own friends last year, and this year he goes and gets on og Luna Lovesgoods imaginary creatures up his crack about 'Arry puttin his name in the Goblet of Fire. Sorry, got off on a rant there fer a bit. Anyway, a lovely story. |
Author Feedback: Glad you enjoyed it! It was my take on Hermione's stream-of-conciousness, and how it might explain so much. (In those innocent, carefree days before Book 6 came out.  ) Thanks for dropping me a line, hagrid! |
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Nice job. You've done a great job interweaving your story with JKR's. THANK YOU! I hope that you do some more of this kind of work. It makes HER work much more tolerable 
Can you write a piece that is just totally over the top Harry/Hermione crazy in love? I'd love to see how you would handle it 
Thanks,
the_scribbler@shadowgard.com |
Author Feedback: You mean, write *fluff??* The few times I've tried, it wasn't all that fluffy. I'll see what I can do, scribbler, but no promises.
Be ever well. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/12/06
I loved this! It was well- written and original. It was really clever of you to use canon dialogue, but as Hermione experienced the conversation. I always thought she acted strange in that scene |
Author Feedback: So did I, and I don't think we ever got a satisfactory explanation for her behavior. (If she's so into Ron, why would Harry's affairs bother her?) This was my spin, and I stand by it. Thank you! |
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A wonderful insight into the (in my opinion) now-missing part of Hermione's mind. It's reading scenes like these in the books that make me think "I really wish we knew what someone besides Harry was thinking". And this scene, in particular, has always been one I've wondered about. I remember shooting my eyebrows up when I read "Of course you're not"; the naturalness of that line sent my Harry/Hermione flag a-waving. So it's wonderful to see someone's fabulous look into Hermione's world. Her internal comments about the boys' stupidity and general naivety about girls was sweet. And that last line was so bittersweet and heartbreaking. Beautiful job! |
Author Feedback: Thank you very much! Yes, this was both an attempt to see this scene from another POV, and my first try at getting inside Hermione's head. At the time I wrote it (pre-HBP), I thought it was obvious that Hermione had at least been *thinking* about kissing Harry. So why wouldn't Hermione make a move on him? The story provides one answer: she'd been trying to set him up with Cho, and didn't realize until too late that she wanted him herself.
Again, thank you for the wonderful review. It was a bit of a surprise to read it... I thought everyone had forgotten about this little piece. |
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sartoneSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 27/07/06
Wow…this was absolutely fantastic! I love how you write Hermione in this fic…makes me want to go re-read OoTP phoenix again. I think I will.
Also want to say thanks for your review reply to “Restoring Hope.” It was a beautiful beginning, I will see it through til the end.
I also realized that I’ve read your works before but didn’t know it. I very much enjoyed “Restitution.” Now on to “fiasco.” Thanks again!!
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Author Feedback: No, thank *you*! Yes, Restitution was mine, and I'm quite proud of it. Rather obsolete these days, of course... sigh.
This was my first attempt to really get into Hermione's head, and I think I did a pretty fair job. Mind, we'll never know *exactly* what she's thinking, but I would have been very happy indeed if it had been along these lines.
Have a good weekend, and thanks again. I appreciate it. |
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Very good short story. Very well done! Captured what "could have been" or "might have been" very well! |
Author Feedback: Thank you! I appreciate your kind words. I can only wish it had captured what "had been" as well... sigh. |
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MuscaSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 07/12/05
Hey, Ama here, (your lj stalker, kundalakesi). Well, let's just say that I'm glad I finally got here and began catching up with your work. Out of all your writing I've read so far, this piece and "The Fiasco" are, without a doubt, my favourites.
I both loved and laughed hysterically at Hermione's internal monologue, and the glimpse into the machinations of her inner mind and her actions. In other words, your Hermione=Spot on. She is such a tight-lidded person despite being the most articulate and vocal of the trio, and this was like pulling apart a winding toy to see how it works inside and why it works the way it does. Of course, admittedly, what you've created is just one possibility out of many, but I'd say even non-HHr shippers would find this thoroughly convincing. And that goes both to this piece and "The Fiasco".
I heartily enjoy your clean, crisp and funny style, and the seamless flow. But without a doubt, I think it's the way you seem to be able grasp and manipulate the voice of the characters that's added another fangirl to your brood 
Thanks so much for the read, I'll be returning to these two pieces many times again.
Ama |
Author Feedback: Hullo, Ama! Thanks so much for taking the time to review... I do appreciate it, especially for older stories like this one.
This story and "Fiasco" were attempts to interpret Hermione's (admittedly strange) behaviour in OotP. She does seem to want Harry to get with Cho, at first. She's much cooler to the idea later on. And, in the hopes that she was beginning to see her friend as more than a friend (oh well...), I wrote these inner monologues. It was fun, trying to get into Hermione's head. She has a strong intellect, but also strong emotions... though she doesn't always let the latter be seen.
Thank you again, Ama, and I'm happy that I could entertain you! Look forward to hearing from you...
-- Paracelsus. |
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Anne USigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 26/10/05
*sigh* This story reminds me why I love OotP so much: Ah, the innocence we had then, believing that JKR wanted Hermione to be with Harry  I feel a bit less disgusted with HBP now than I did 3 months ago, but only because I've been hanging out in the PK forums, where people have been trying to figure out what the he** was going on in that book. I think you've nailed what Hermione was feeling at that moment in OotP. What happened later, I think was that after the DoM fight, Hermione had time to think about the fact that she'd almost been killed, and that being so close to Harry was a very dangerous proposition. I think that, not knowing how he'd panicked when he thought she was dead, Hermione began to withdraw from Harry then, and started considering Ron as a more "sensible" object of her affections, especially since it seemed to her that Harry would never return her feelings if she revealed them. Then Harry revealed the Prophecy to her and Ron in HBP, and I think that sealed Hermione's idea that she needed to withdraw from Harry and "move on" to Ron, who's always seemed to fancy her.
Anyway...I loved what you did here. You really got into Hermione's head well, and I loved how she was busily berating herself and doing fancy mental footwork in the midst of the conversation.  |
Author Feedback: (It's nice when an older story gets reviewed... sort of a lift to the spirit. Thank you, Anne.)
Yeah, I loved the H/Hr in OotP. Well, I loved how Hermione had developed (e.g., she may not have been voted the leader of the DA, but she was definitely Harry's partner doing so), and I loved how Harry had developed (e.g., his most miserable year to date ended with him finally accepting the consequences of his acts), and I loved how their dynamic together had grown. All, of course, to be tossed into the wastebin in HBP. Sigh.
But I like your theory: that Hermione's reaction to nearly dying at the DoM was to distance herself from Harry. Which would explain the odd looks she was giving him when they first met in HBP. Yeah, Ron is the "safe" choice, safe on so many levels: not just physically, but emotionally. We'll just have to see if their relationship goes beyond alternately snogging and shouting.
(ahem) But about this ficlet. I'm glad you enjoyed it; I enjoyed writing it. I found I could slide into Hermione's head very easily, once I got the hang of it. And it did explain a lot, to my mind.
Have a good weekend, Anne. And thanks again. |
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Aaaahhhh... the nostalgia of OOTP.
What deluded innocents we were then.
Still, I am not bailing on this ship. Because it's the best ship, goddammit! Sorry, a bit emotional there. But remembering the good old days of pre-HBP brings out the cranky delusion in me.
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Author Feedback: *Militant* deluded innocents, if you please! ((laughs)) Me too. I'm glad this could bring back a memory of happier days. (And I agree. This is by far the best ship... the one I wished could happen in canon, and which happens every day in fanon. I can live with that.)
Until later. -- Paracelsus. |
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SpeedzSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 16/09/05
hmmm, interesting. I wish that was really what was going on in Hermione's head lol. I like it. |
Author Feedback: I'd really like to know what's been going on in Hermione's head. It would make our lives *so* much simpler, don't you think?
I thought everyone had forgotten about this little story. Thanks for reviewing it! |
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Poor Hermione, she just can't get it right can she? of course we *know* what will eventually happen, at least in your happy little world (for those of you who are now thoroughly confused, please check out Paracelsus' MOST EXCELLENT series of stories on FA.org: I Have A Rendezvous With Death, And Miles To Go Before I Sleep, and Restitution, not to mention two excellent one shots, "The Official Confirmation of the Existence of Heliopaths" and "Essence of Honeysuckle" Link here: http://www.thedarkarts.org/authorLinks/Paracelsus/
and no, I am in NO way affiliated with this excellent author except as a dedicated fan.)
Anyway, back to this story only. Hermione did seem to be striving awfully hard for the "disinterested" friend mode here. Poor kid, it has got to be awkward being 16 and unsure of your feelings. (I'm basing her being 16 on the fact that she's the oldest of the trio and I'm pretty sure Harry was 15 throughout OotP). Anyway, I enjoyed this story - I think you captured the angst of a teenaged girl quite well. Should I be worried? lol!!  |
Author Feedback: Well, I dunno. For what Hermione thought she wanted to do -- that is, make Harry happy by getting him together with Cho -- she performed fairly well. Throughout canon she's been quite good at hiding her feelings when she wants to. It wasn't until this moment, though, that she realized that maybe, just maybe, she didn't *want* Harry together with Cho... but by then it was too late. And after that, she still had to play the disinterested friend.
I'm really hoping that HBP will allow us to see more of Hermione, the feelings she doesn't show Harry and Ron. 39 days and counting!
A bientot... -- Paracelsus. |
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I really like it, it fits so well, i just love it. |
Author Feedback: So glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for telling me! |
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I believe you captured Hermione's thoughts in that pivotal scene perfectly- I'll not read that chapter the same again.
Thanks, mate! |
Author Feedback: Well, if I've permanently changed your perception of that scene, then my work is done.
Thanks for reviewing! |
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