Oooohhh...this is good. I can't hardley wait for the next chapter!! You are good at writing, and hope that it won't take too long for the next chapter...lol.

Youre a good author, I was depressed with book 7's ending, fanfiction is all I have left with HP, but I think this is a good story. If you arent totally done with the HP world, please keep this story going. If you need someone to proofread it, just email me, I enjoy beta-ing. BTW, I have a challenge going, if you or anyone you know is interested. I would like someone to re-wright the 6th and 7th books almost identical, but with H/Hr. If youre interested, agian, email me.

I liked this story I'm new to this site so thats why I'm just now reading it...I am kinda eager to read the end, is there any chance you were planning to finish this? later

this story is really good...cant wait till you update this story..its getting really interesting..well great job on the story and hope you update soon

This story is an interesting story so far. I like how the story flows for the moment.

You've got some good plot ideas, but you *really, really, really* need a beta. Run-on sentences, sentence fragments, misspellings, and poor grammar are present throughout this, and it really takes away from the story.

your stories are great..your doing a good job..keep up the good work

I just started reaing this story today and I have to say that I like it a lot. I can't wait to see what will happen next!

Hi, thank you so much for the chapter, I really love your story! I can't wait to read more so please update again soon!

Pretty good, but you might want to grab a dictionary next time.

You need to find a beta for this first chapter, because I am reading several gramatical and spelling errors. Also take+ing is not tacking but taking, and in the third to last paragraph you used the wrong word. "Hermione stepped threw..." makes no sense it should be "Hermione stepped through..." The threw you used means to throw in past tense.

Feel is spelled F-E-E-L. You spelled feel like fell, which means, I fell down the stairs. It is getting better though. Proof read your chapters or get a beta.

Well, This was a lot better, I think. It had a better pace, and he is already declaring his love for her? They aren't even going out!

Hello,
I like it I guess, but is English your first language? That was an overly dramatic first chapter and not very well writen, but diffenetly has a thing going for it.

I thought it was really really good, if you put in more information it would be great