AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 12/08/06
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"Mate? U all right?" he asked, staring at Harry's lost expression."
I don't think I've ever seen that type of slang here before. I almost flinched. |
Author Feedback: Oh my! Did I really? I finished the chapter at about 3am, so you can imagine how my eyes were crossing by that time but I just couldn't stop. I will re-upload the chapter tonight definitely cause there are like a million mistakes, and if anything, I am VERY picky.
Thanks for the observation and please don't stop reading, I usually don't commit those kinds of HORRORS. |
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So far so good. Very good story. you have my attention. |
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AlorkinSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 18/04/05
A very hard top read beginning. My own wife died when my daughter was a year and a half. I've been raising hre for the past nine years, and she wants to go to Hogwarts, too! I hope to read more along this vein. Thank you. Alorkin
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Author Feedback: I am sorry to hear that. You did post another review. I am glad you're feeling with the fic and I would most certainly like to know if I'm approaching to what it's like in real life as the chapters go on... |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 18/04/05
your doing wonderful on this please keep this up.
Please add some new chapters to Darling Jo it is very good please countiune with it.
thank you |
Author Feedback: Thanks very much, I am glad you're liking it. I'll definitely write more when I have some free time, just that I have Uni and work and two more fics going on at the same time lol. |
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orange08Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 18/04/05
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Author Feedback: Uhm... well, in the summary of the story, and in the first A/N, it says that this is not centered in a present H/Hr ship. But no worries, you'll get what you want... eventually *grins evilly*
Thanks for the review! |
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BooknutSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 18/04/05
I have to say i was thinking in my head no no no when Hermione died so i really hope this fic has a happy ending which i'm sure it will! So far you're doing a good job but i'm really curious about who Harry's new love interest will be mmmm. Waiting patiently for your update. |
Author Feedback: I did't ever say he was going to have a new love interest, he's WAY too hurt to look at someone else. I only said Jo needed a mum and that his new challenge was raising the little girl right.
I am VERY glad you're enjoying the story, and usually a happily ever after is called... but there is still a looong way to get there lol. |
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fishizzleUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 18/04/05
hey this is good, will there be like a hermione reincarnation as a young proffessor, or as a first year student?t that would be pretty cool. pleae update!!!!! |
Author Feedback: I didn't say he was going to have a new love interest, he's WAY too hurt to look at someone else. I only said Jo needed a mum and that his new challenge was raising the little girl right.
Thanks very much for your review, I am glad you're enjoying the story 
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Nicely done chapter with Harry's insecurities, after all, he never had the chance to firmly establish the family with Hermione and honestly knows so little about raising children, especially girls. Its a very good thing that he had the Weasley's to help.
Interesting how Ron keeps coming in between their arguments, just like Harry used to intervene between Ron and Hermione.
Looking to see where this goes. |
Author Feedback: That is very much true, and what is to come won't help him at all. I am glad you noticed that little thing between the three, no one else has. You know, you're usually one of the few that understand mostly everything I try to say in the stories and I'm glad I have a reader like you |
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Not a bad start, considering you've committed the heinous sin of killing Hermione off at the beginning, an unforgiveable act. Since you've referred to a 'new' wife and mum, I have to assume that somehow she's to be resurrected. However, you're badly in need of a beta:
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me and Uncle Ron - Uncle Ron and I
little lapsus - little lapse
would've been of us - would've become of us
small treats - small traits
never been subdued - nver been subjected
growing aura - glowing aura
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I'll check back after a few more chapters and see if Hermione has returned...
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Author Feedback: Lol, the "heinous sin"? That's a new one... thanks for calling me that lmao.
Geez! I did have many horrors, didn't I? Well, you know I usually don't have them but this chapter I finished at like 3am, so my eyes were crossing but my fingers didn't stop typing lol.
Just a could things:
"me and Uncle Ron" - That was intended, colloquial talking.
OH! And it'll be a long way till we get to Hermione, so don't get your hopes up for forecoming chapters lol.
"Lapsus" - That's the word in spanish (an in latin) but thanks a lot for bringing that to my attention.
"Small treats" - That was the sentence, it was a sort of sarcastical remark.
"Growing aura" - The aura was growing around her; it is obvious that it glowed lol.
Thanks a bunch for the attention. If you want and have time, you could beta this story... how's that sound? |
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eliewSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 18/04/05
Nice story so far, you have gotten hold of my attention. But what I'm curious about is that, what happen to Hermione? While I believe that she probably died (the scream of destroyed soul), the red light like would be a stunner right? Unless that was aimed at Harry?
Anyway, interesting story, with Harry still trying to come to terms with Hermione not being there for him, and trying to raise a daughter that reminded him of his wife in almost everything she do, when he probably have so many insecurities about taking care of a child. |
Author Feedback: A pop - Harry apparating
A scream of a destroyed soul - That was Harry when seeing Hermione lying on teh ground
A red flash - Stunner spell towards Harry
Darkness - Harry stunned
Glad you're liking the story, I'll update asap. And thanks for the review! |
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Orli_LuvaSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 10/04/05
in only one chapter you got me hooked, i really wanna no what happens next. Hope you update really soon luv orli_luva xx |
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Very nice so far. I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this. Keep up the good work. |
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OMG! Hurry and update! This story is really good! I can't wait to see what will happen next!
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