Not too bad and even the out of place tense errors have lessoned. I've always wondered even when reading the books, how can a person have two best friends. The actual term best friend precludes having two of them because one of the two still has to be the better friend. As in this trio even in canon Hermione was always Harry's better friend, she never really deserted him when he needed her unlike Ron.

For those who read these reviews and write, please if you write Hagrid with an accent, remember that he only drops the letter H from the begining of words, all the other words if he says them in any british accent would almost all have the first letter of every word.

Er hmm, I think if my friends left it until late evening before giving me my birthday cards, or just proper birthday greetings I would most likely be too pissed off at them to join in a suprise party at the end of the day. Lets face it the birthday is practicaly over by 7pm, its far to late in the day to wish some one a happy birthday cause you already ruined the bloody day for them by not aknowledging it early in the day.

I love the joke about Ron having talents, I almost fell from my stool reading that one. I did calm when i thought that he might just have enough talent to be able to win an eating contest if he stopped eating long enough to take the prize. Ron Weasley in canon has no talents what so ever, the theory that he is a great strategist because he is good at chess is way out. Good chess players are the people who can remember the chess moves from either books or previous chess games.

the story overall is so far quite good though the way the tense shifts around is a bit annoying. Still its to late for critisisms now so long after it was completed, I just wished to point it out for new readers who like to check the reviews first.

I have read this story several times now and I still enjoy it. Very well written and thought out.

I understand Hermione's smart and all, but no one casually studies quantum mechanics without first having an extensive calculus and physics knowledge base that would require years to build up. It's something that people really don't even start studying until graduate level college courses. No one, not even Stephen Hawking or Einstein himself could have done what you're suggesting Hermione is going to do (i.e. learn and understand quantum mechanics in one summer without having any base in either physics or calculus).

I've taken numerous calculus and physics courses in my life and I'll freely admit that quantum mechanics is way above my head.

I understand you probably through that in there because quantum mechanics is a counter-intuitive weird science that has strange implications, but it's an immersion killer because it's flatly impossible for one to learn the subject enough to use it in the manner that she wants to.

I like Hermione as a character and think she's a perfect fit for Harry, but she doesn't have close to a genius level intellect. I'm not saying she's not in the top 5% of the world, but if she truly had a genius level intellect, she would never have to study like she does. School would come ridiculously easy to her and she would likely only have to read something once to both remember and understand it. Basically school would be immensely boring to her if she were a true genius because she would never be challenged.

2004? Wow I must have not been paying attention earlier when I made that comment about music. My apologies, I made the mistake in assuming that you kept the time period the same as canon for your story.

Seriously Evanescence? Do you realize that it's only 1995 and Evanescence won't be popular for another 10 years or so?

I understand this is your story, but why not choose a band that was actually popular from that time period like say: Pearl Jam, Soundgarden, Nirvana, or Stone Temple Pilots (all of which were absolutely huge in 1995).

Granted this is a small gripe when compared to the story as whole, since it's a good story, but still it's something that's always irked me about fanfiction writers. Everyone wants to plug their favorite musicians not realizing that the bands didn't even exist in the early 1990s.

Just finished reading this story and absolutely loved it..I look forward to reading the next part.

Just finished reading this story and absolutely loved it..I look forward to reading the next part.

I think it's you grammar as well. You shift tenses. It goes back and forth from past tense to present tense. An example is the first paragraph. Ok, I'm going to go back to reading the chapter.

Also as fun as Umbridge getting the crap beatten out of her is, what purpose did that serve? It seems dodgy to me.

Ouch. I loved the bit with Molly tearing into Ron. Truly inspired and really funny.

There's still something off about your writting. I think it's to do with you capitalization.

I enjoyed your take on Founder history. And the part where Hermione is talking to Dumbledore and that she's like demanding more advanced training.

The only thing I have to say is I'm not a fan of the nickname of 'Mione. I think Hermione would be the kind of person that's like NOOOOOOO! I'm not ashamed of my name.

I'm giving this story a chance, but I'm kinda blah about it right now. But we'll see.