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I have read this story several times now and I still enjoy it. Very well written and thought out. |
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VanderSigned | Chapter : 18 | Date : 09/10/09
I understand Hermione's smart and all, but no one casually studies quantum mechanics without first having an extensive calculus and physics knowledge base that would require years to build up. It's something that people really don't even start studying until graduate level college courses. No one, not even Stephen Hawking or Einstein himself could have done what you're suggesting Hermione is going to do (i.e. learn and understand quantum mechanics in one summer without having any base in either physics or calculus).
I've taken numerous calculus and physics courses in my life and I'll freely admit that quantum mechanics is way above my head.
I understand you probably through that in there because quantum mechanics is a counter-intuitive weird science that has strange implications, but it's an immersion killer because it's flatly impossible for one to learn the subject enough to use it in the manner that she wants to.
I like Hermione as a character and think she's a perfect fit for Harry, but she doesn't have close to a genius level intellect. I'm not saying she's not in the top 5% of the world, but if she truly had a genius level intellect, she would never have to study like she does. School would come ridiculously easy to her and she would likely only have to read something once to both remember and understand it. Basically school would be immensely boring to her if she were a true genius because she would never be challenged. |
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VanderSigned | Chapter : 11 | Date : 09/10/09
2004? Wow I must have not been paying attention earlier when I made that comment about music. My apologies, I made the mistake in assuming that you kept the time period the same as canon for your story. |
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VanderSigned | Chapter : 6 | Date : 09/10/09
Seriously Evanescence? Do you realize that it's only 1995 and Evanescence won't be popular for another 10 years or so?
I understand this is your story, but why not choose a band that was actually popular from that time period like say: Pearl Jam, Soundgarden, Nirvana, or Stone Temple Pilots (all of which were absolutely huge in 1995).
Granted this is a small gripe when compared to the story as whole, since it's a good story, but still it's something that's always irked me about fanfiction writers. Everyone wants to plug their favorite musicians not realizing that the bands didn't even exist in the early 1990s. |
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gravacorSigned | Chapter : 27 | Date : 19/05/09
Just finished reading this story and absolutely loved it..I look forward to reading the next part. |
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gravacorSigned | Chapter : 27 | Date : 19/05/09
Just finished reading this story and absolutely loved it..I look forward to reading the next part. |
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I think it's you grammar as well. You shift tenses. It goes back and forth from past tense to present tense. An example is the first paragraph. Ok, I'm going to go back to reading the chapter.
Also as fun as Umbridge getting the crap beatten out of her is, what purpose did that serve? It seems dodgy to me. |
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Ouch. I loved the bit with Molly tearing into Ron. Truly inspired and really funny.
There's still something off about your writting. I think it's to do with you capitalization. |
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I enjoyed your take on Founder history. And the part where Hermione is talking to Dumbledore and that she's like demanding more advanced training.
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The only thing I have to say is I'm not a fan of the nickname of 'Mione. I think Hermione would be the kind of person that's like NOOOOOOO! I'm not ashamed of my name.
I'm giving this story a chance, but I'm kinda blah about it right now. But we'll see. |
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I think Dumbledore should have trained Hermione and then she could teach Harry. HURRAY. Problem sloved.
And everyone should have physial training. And I hope Cho gets redemption and you don't make he have a permanent case of bitchface the whole fic.
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 25/10/08
What? That's totally impratical and stupid to not teach the people that are so going to follow Harry anywhere some physical training.
In fact if I were the headmaster and flipping Death Eater attacks were becoming the norm I would shift the curriculum. I mean there is a new Minister so he would likely allow it.
You should atleast have like a PE class so kids could atleast run away really fast. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 24/10/08
BlAH. The whole OMG Hermione got hit with a curse made me think that she and Harry were going to end up together. THANKS ALOT JK. |
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Bloody hell that was good . . . .
i cant wait now to start reading the next story !
Dumbeldave |
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damn i would want her pissed at me ! ! ! !
Dave |
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