Well I thought it was MUCH more then a Eh...I liked it a lot - very cute  If it turned into something longer though...I certainly wouldn't object. |
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trayjaiSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 14/02/05
I enjoyed your story. Short and sweet. It helped brighten my day. One never knows where a writing ideas comes from...I'm grateful that you did put this together. Now about that love and a lotto ticket...  |
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2buxSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/02/05
that was great. i liked it more than 'eh'. so what if it was a little short, your writing skills and sweet story made all the difference.
thanks. |
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abgSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/02/05
very cute. it's almost valentines day, and i'm grateful for a some fluff. it keeps me from being bitter and cynical.  |
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LyndsayUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/02/05
Eh? Well, I loved this! Short, but sweet. Now about thatt lottery ticket...
Thanks! |
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You're right, this is surely better than comparing love to a lottery ticket!
But you're also wrong. This is definitely not 'Eh.' This is better than that. This is 'Heh!' ... sweet, fluffy and really better than I could have come up with at 11:30 on a Friday night. If they're out of character, it's only very slight. To me, they were very much IN character.
Great job and thanks for sharing this!   |
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JanieBSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/02/05
Yes, absolutely it was BAM and FAST - but good. And if not rushed, could have been GREAT! Don't be in such a screaming great hurry - take time, stretch it a bit, revise - you had a wonderful idea here and you very obviously have a good writing talent - use it! I still enjoyed it, because you ARE good.
xxxx Lady Jane xxxx |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/02/05
i liked this story. it was short, sweet, and just one of those warm fuzzy feeling fics. it actually made me think about real life... are first kisses ever that perfect? it would be great if they were. thanks for sharing it. oh, and it definitely seems much better than a story about love and a lottery ticket
i'm checking to see if you have other fics written. i like your writing style. |
Author Feedback: When it's near Valentine's Day, we get to pretend that first kisses are ALWAYS perfect. lol
I don't have any other fics up at this point...two one-shots that I started and never ended up getting around to finishing, a full-length Harry/Hermione...THING, that's been sitting on my hard-drive since like, July, with 10 out of 15 chapters completed.... But thanks for commenting on my style - makes me feel all special....  |
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MuirninSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/02/05
You are correct... it did get over rather quickly... It was cute... in a rapid sort of way...
My first thought when I got to the end.. was *giggle* Did Hermione ever finish her Astronomy paperwork??? *LOL*
er... ummm... *sigh* Snogging.. it's such a good thing... I miss it so...
As Always,
Muirnin |
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Aww...that was cute... And I liked how you had it end. Though I wonder who it was that found them... |
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Hey! I was not surprised at how great this fic was after reading your articulate reviews of my stories.
You really captured the essence of a one-shot well. It was understated and tasteful, with just enough amount of courage to be called truly Gryffindor. Honestly, I didn't find it OOC at all. I think that someday, Harry and Hermione will have to grow up and deal with emotion...it seems that because they are best mates, they WOULD find love in a sudden, unguarded moment.
Adorable. I want to read more stories from you. Maybe we could write one together?
Love,
Mara Jade |
Author Feedback: Aw, thanks.
I  your writing; doing a fic together would be great...e-mail me any time....
K |
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I'll agree, it was very quick. Tho it was cute to see Hermione's reversal of perspective on the whole Astronomy Tower bit. |
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Quite an ironic turnabout, eh? The Hermione at the beginning was characterized very well; I do picture her thinking of the Astronomy like that, "I wish these... these... *children* would grow up and stop waggling their eyebrows everytime it's mentioned! Honestly!" Or some such. Harry was a little too forward to be believable, though he usually has to be if you want to get them together in less than 100 pages. As you mentioned, it moved a little quickly, but it was still enjoyable, and Hermione's change of tune was quite humorous; she effectively called her old self uptight. Who knows, if she decided to start using the time-turner again, maybe she *did* call herself uptight =) Cheers, |
Author Feedback: "Harry was a little too forward to be believable, though he usually has to be if you want to get them together in less than 100 pages."
That's exactly what I was thinking of when I referred to the story as 'out of character'. And I actually had a different first draft where he wasn't as forward...but it ended up being too 'woe is me' for my liking (though it's looking a bit like that's how the entire 6th book canon's going to end up so...maybe in a few months I can pull it off more easily, eh?).
I was sitting at the computer trying to make the entire thing sound plausible, and basically went 'Eh, it's almost Valentine's Day. Eh, I want it to be fluffy. Eh, screw it.'
Eh, indeed.
"Who knows, if she decided to start using the time-turner again, maybe she *did* call herself uptight."
Hmmmm....  |
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I don't think this is so eh. I like it. I like the ending the most with the person going 'honestly' and then 'what did they expect?This was the Astronomy Tower, after all.' It was a very good end. Good job. |
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hammergalSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 13/02/05
Hey, I loved this! It was terrific. Short, yes, but definitely worth the read. I don't think they were out of character at all, not really. I could see them doing this and I thought it was perfectly sweet! Good job!
hammergal |
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