Wow. That was truly amazing. Sad, but amazing. Loved the descriptions, and I really felt his pain-signs of a talented author. :-)

add jumped up and down on it in a mud puddle to that list. (if you can think of anything else to do to the t-shirt please let me know).

Oh my God! You captured it perfectly. No dramatic death to part them, no affairs, just 'wasn't meant to be'. Been there, done that, got the t-shirt, ripped it up, spat on it and thrown it in the fire (break ups make you bitter). Didn't get me crying but definately cought the heart strings.

((((((((Hugs))))))))) That was so poignant and touching- it was written beautifully. I'm so sorry that you are feeling as such. I've never had my heart broken before- although I am in love and its a scary thought to know that it happens- that one day I'll feel this pain as well. The emotions were so tangible so real that I can feel the effect of the words still on me now. It was a wonderful one shot- I'm only sorry that such bitter circumstances fueled its creation- however I hope it helped. Soemtimes through writing we can purge our souls of our own problems. (((((((Hugs to you))))))) It really was beautiful!

Sorry, no ouch intended. What meant by jokingly saying "Use your powers for good" was to channel the angst -you're- feeling into a happy ending in your fic. I didn't mean to infer the fic was bad - it was quite accurate, actually. I'm a guy, I know that side of things quite well.

I see the Sarah McLachlan titles for your fics, so I'll use her as an example (note that my email addy is at -surfacing- .com

Some of Sarah's best stuff was written as a result of personal angst in her life. Most of her songs, in fact (Touch, Solace, Fumbling, Freedom) were done in like a 5 year period (1988-1993/4 or so), after two big breakups. Then Surfacing, then she gets a husband and a kid and then releases nothing new from like 1997 to 2004.

I sit here at the verge of tears, not only because of your story, but also knowing the truth behind it. The bitter self-degradation is the worst of it, believing that everything touched is corrupted. Wonderfully written story.

An ending WITHOUT Harry & Hermione?!!! Is this alowed to be here?! *checks that she is indeed in Portkey* It's too good to be true!!!!! You gave this a REAL, ORIGINAL and surprising ending (for everyone was waiting for the moment Hr entered the door) not putting them up together, yet, you manage to describe their love as something so beautiful and true we were touch by it as if it was there!!!
I love it. To. Pieces.
Thanks for writing this.
*marks as favorite*

I don't get it.
Great writing but what happened to hermione??

A very accurate expression of heartache from a male perspective. You get points for that, but I have to take them away again for writing about such a cliched story line.

Next time use your powers for good, young grasshopper!

I forgot to mention that if this is truly a one-shot, you might want to change it from 'in progress' to 'completed'. I forget to do that myself sometimes so I thought it couldn't possibly hurt to remind you!

Thanks again for sharing with us in this way.

Take care.

For not being betaed there were very few (and very insignificant) errors. It was very well written but I can't help but wonder who's feeling all of this or is it supposed to be open to speculation?

In my mind I picture it as Ron saying goodbye to Hermione who has left him for Harry (although there's no real indication of that). In another way I can see it as being Harry but the only way is if she died, right? I hate to think about her dying so I'll have to stick with it being Ron... I will continue to stand by my conviction........I LOVE my rose-colored glasses....

Very nicely done. Thanks for sharing....I hope that in some way it helped with whatever pain you're feeling.

H_HrFan

Wow - how very sad that was. I hope it helped you with some of what you were dealing with and I hope Harry (and you, too!) are both happier in the future.