manitildeSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 21/03/08
.....um, well this is very interesting, although, truthfully, not all that believable. But it's a good read, and I'm really wondering what can happen next.  |
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chelley83Signed | Chapter : 2 | Date : 28/11/07
ok i loved how in the first chapter heather's friends had the same initials as harry's...and in this one i like how it's going with petunia and dudley and all...it's going to make for an interesting story...sorry had to get that out before i read on  |
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If you were trying to say please lift your feet it would be S'il vous plait, eleve tes pied. Where all the e's in eleve have des accent aigue. |
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mg2090Signed | Chapter : 19 | Date : 05/08/07
the story was good and well written. my only issue is that i think you greatly exaggerated heather's powers and the american schools and magic. it seems as if you're trying to glorifying the united states. and im a neutral party.
otherwise the writing and plot was great.
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baloo41Signed | Chapter : 15 | Date : 08/06/06
Hi...got a minor problem. You say that Lily and James were in 7th year while Molly and Arthur were in their 5th. The problem is that you state earlier that Lily was expecting for Harry in her 7th year. Here's the rub...
Molly and Arthur had to have Bill, Charlie, Percy, Fred, George and Ron all at the same time in order for Harry and Ron to be even close in age. You see what I mean? Molly and Lily couldn't have been close in age at all in order for her to pop out all those young-uns. Oops.
Good story though. I still don't see how Danielle got the drop on Heather, what with her wand-less magic and sorceress training. She's supposed to be a top dueler and she would have been extremely suspicious of Danielle from the start of that confrontation.
I'm sure I'll chat at ya later.
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HillaryUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 29/05/06
That was a shocker! Looking foward to reading the next chapter when I get the chance. |
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adamUnsigned | Chapter : 12 | Date : 12/03/06
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Author Feedback: I thought people would like that slogan. I know I sure did. I am glad you are enjoying the story. Be sure to read Harry Potter and the Onyx Spell Book when you are done with this story. Book 3 will hopefully come soon.
God bless,
S'Eleene Paris |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 19 | Date : 03/03/06
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Author Feedback: Unique...a word I love to hear. I am glad to hear that you luvd it, luvd it, luvd it! I will fully suggest to you to read the sequel. I honestly enjoyed writting it more than I did one.
Go bless,
S'Eleene Paris
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 19 | Date : 23/02/06
Wow, that was a really good story. I particualrly liked the thing that is missing in alot of other stories...a plot line. Kudos on an amazing story, I am about to start the sequel, and I can only pray that it is as good as the first. Once again wonderful story! |
Author Feedback: I'm really glad you liked my story and I really do appreciate your kind words about it.
I do hope you like the sequel. I loved it way more than I did the first one. That's because there was a whole bunch of character development that I'm not really all that great at.
God bless,
S'Eleene Paris |
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i enjoed this chapter very much it was unusual as i am used to " the boy who lived " can't wait for you to update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Author Feedback: Warning: heather seems a little too perfect to start off with. Its just her putting
up a front. Keep going. She does humble further into the story. i'm working on my
characterization and even i was like "She's too perfect" it changes though as the story
goes. I promise, she does tone down.
God bless,
S'Eleene Paris |
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krystalUnsigned | Chapter : 19 | Date : 08/02/06
 I loved the story. I will read any other stories you put out. |
Author Feedback: Krystal,
I am glad you liked my stories. Let me suggest you read Saint Agnes Eve. Its by
far my favorite of the stories that I wrote this far. Also, let me suggest a few yahoo groups to you. These are the yahoo groups that I own and where I post all of my
stories, finished or not, before anywhere else.
Third-Floor Corridor Yahoo group
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/Thirdfloorcorridor/
From S'Eleene Paris' Desk
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/seleeneparis/
I usually update From S'Eleene Paris' desk first. This also has a few shorts that I
don't have here on portkey. I do hope you enjoy.
God bless,
S'Eleene Paris |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 18/01/06
Well, that was a shocker.  Snape? Can't really imagine him being a father. LoL. Well, that was a nice twist. |
Author Feedback: Yep it was Snape...must be why he was the way he was in the books.
;-)
God bless,
S'Eleene Paris |
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Light256Signed | Chapter : 19 | Date : 15/01/06
wow very good story.. Keep up the great writting. And the hole twist he might have a sister i loved it keep up the great job |
Author Feedback: I am glad you like the story. Be sure to Read Harry Potter and the Onyx Spell Book.
Its the second book of the series. Sableshuman and I are working on a third.
God bless,
S'Eleene Paris |
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harry31Signed | Chapter : 19 | Date : 07/12/05
this is a very good story i liked it very much i am waiting for the next chapter |
Author Feedback: Well, 19 chapters is it. You'll have to read book 2 to know what else is going on.
Thanks for your kind words.
God bless,
S'Eleene Paris |
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Ha very clever. I like how you slipped in Emma Watson.
*sigh* What a beautiful young women, looked incredible in the gown....er.Oops
Anyways I really like this story so far. I have to say it put me in a fit of some very unmanly giggles. |
Author Feedback: "I have to say it put me in a fit of some very unmanly giggles."
*sigh and smiles evilly* I do love putting men in to very girly unmanly
giggles. Sableshuman says its because I do it so well that I enjoy it.
I can only wonder what you will think of the stealth uniforms in
Harry Potter and the Ony Spell Book. *grins even more evilly* Yep
they were my idea and not his. Sableshuman has always said I am
a bit of a tease...I have a tendency to agree.
I am also glad you were clever enough to figure out some of the more
clever jokes. The second one has a lot fewer, but its more action
oriented, but I am sure the guys in my fan viewing won't mind that
too much at all.
God bless.
S'Eleene Paris |
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