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Well, this was okay, but you'll probably think me brutally honest (and you'd be right) when I say that everyone was decidedly out of character. I mean, to start, the "fight" seemed like something Ron and Hermione might do, I like to think that Harry and Hermione understand each other a little better than that (though it could be a truly biased opinion on my side since I live for their ship), and, well, Hermione was WAY too hysterical. The only time when Hermione was like that was in third year, and that was partly due to the time turner stress, other than that she truly doesn't behave that way, and she knows that Harry sometimes says things that may hurt, but she also knows that he generally doesn't mean them. Well, that's about it. For the most part, though, I found it a good enough read, so there ya go ^_^.
Peace
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Author Feedback: Brutally honest is good.  Everyone has their little rifts sometime, Harry and Hermione aren't excluded, sometimes I think people just need to yell at each other, even people that love each other. Hermione might have been a tad hysterical but sometimes people are a bit irrational when they've just had a big fight with someone they are really close to and that's all I was trying to show, I'm sorry if you thought it was a bit overboard for her. Even though she may know that he doesn't always mean the things he says, doesn't mean she never stresses over it. Sorry if you found it unbelievable, but thanks for the honest review and your opinion. Everything constructive always helps.  |
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Aw!! Such cute fluff!! Very nicely done and I like the story very much. I thoroughly enjoyed the story, and the ending was just cute! Great job!
Thanks, Shayna |
Author Feedback: Aw thank you, I had a bit of trouble with the ending but I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for your review! |
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Ohh, that was sweet. I can't believe they fought on their anniversary. Im so glad Harry came back. I like that ending it's cute, and a bit romantic.  |
Author Feedback: I know...aren't I just mean? But I put them back together before the night was all the way through...  I still don't like the ending, but I'm glad you do. Thanks for reviewing, Emily! I  you! |
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Loved it! Though I would have like to see more story to it. Like what was said in the fight? What happened afterward? Besides there making up... But other then that I like the story alot. |
Author Feedback: I'm thinking about doing a follow-up, but my laziness must be coaxed to give up for a while before I'll write. hehe. Thanks for reviewing! |
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LilLambSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/01/05
aww! that was very good! yay! i just loved how hermione's hair kept getting more and more knotted and harry worked thru some of those knots for her.. so cute! what a couple! great job! i look forward to reading more of your stories! |
Author Feedback: Thanks very much! I was slightly amused by Hermione's hair, too, glad someone caught that. I thought that might be something she would do to her hair, being completely oblivious to it until it was completely horrible and harry had to fix it for her. Thanks for reading and for telling me what you thought! |
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Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in life when you can.
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I thought that it was a bittersweet little one shot. I know what its like to fight like that, especially when you are a relatively new couple. I thought that it was very nice that when they came back together, neither was accusing and rather they both wanted to make things right.
Hopefully your work on SP goes better. I'll try to read and review and maybe give you ideas. |
Author Feedback: Aw, well thanks for thinking it believable, I am always frightened when I write uncomfortable scenes that they will come out all wrong.  I think that Harry and Hermione wouldn't be much inclined to fight after both cooling down a bit and thinking a bit more clearly; they  each other too much. hehe. Thanks for the encouragement on SP, I do think it might be hopeless though! Thanks for your feedback. |
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sherylSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/01/05
That was a really cute fic. the fight was pointless in my opinion but the reason behind it was good enough reason. overall, i really liked this fic and hope that you do write more one-shots as this one was really good! keep it up!! |
Author Feedback: Yes, the fight was pointless, but, in my mind, that was the whole point. I'm glad you liked it and I will most assuredly be writing more one-shots.  I find them quite amusing and a good releif for writing tensions. Thanks for reviewing! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/01/05
very good! i loved it alot! keep up the good work and i would really like to see the rest |
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quizgirlSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/01/05
I miss a twist or two in this, it was very easy to predict... Oh well, I still like it!
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Author Feedback: Hehe, well easy-to-predict fics are always fun to read for me at least, this way you know at least they'll have a happy ending. Thanks for reveiwing! |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/01/05
not to bad i only wish that there was another chap |
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DylanUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/01/05
That was good. Short, but good.
I wish you hadn't ended it when you did.
This could have been m uch longer with the history of the fights, and a great make up chapter! 
Enjoyed it though. |
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TaraUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 19/01/05
Wow nice fic, as I say so my self, , by the way you also can vote for h/hr I don`t a guy told on vertisarum.com anyway Great fic, hoped you liked to write it to. |
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A good start, but a little thin at the end. The characterizations and dialog are solid, but it all peters out just when it was getting good. Too many questions left unanswered for a one-shot; why are they apart so much, why do they fight all the time, etcetera. Even some flashbacks to little snips of the relationship could explain a lot; he's working too hard, she's pursuing a career, all sorts of snapshots of their life together would fill in the blanks. |
Author Feedback: I don't really like the ending either, but it took me an hour just for those last few paragraphs. Dunno why it was causing me so much trouble, but it was. I should probably do a follow-up to explain all the stuff that was left out, but it depends on how lazy I feel and how much homework is being avoided(right now, the latin is being avoided ) but since a lot of people want it to go a little further, I might just be tempted to write more. thanks for reveiwing and your helpful comments, I really appreciate it! |
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