I liked this fic. I didn't like that it was ron/herm. but i still liked it. its was terribly sad and it made me cry. I hate that people didn't like this fic. and don't think it is a h/hr, becasue IT IS! They just needed to open thier eyes a little and accept that not every h/hr fic has them together. I am glad you wrote this, i hope you write more. good job!

Well, I read your fic a little earier today, and saw the update and read it. I must apologize if anyone had offended you. I, really did like this fic. It was sad yes, but showed much feeling in it. I guess everyone has to go through an experience like this at one time in their life or another. I too sympathize with you on your past experiences. I also had that happen to me too. But I actually never really dated the girl in question. We were young. Still not to say that I didn't try. We were close. But then after graduation, I never saw her again. She is always on my mind whether I like it or not. I guess your very first crush is one that stay with you for the rest of your life. All I have are the memories, but I will cherish them the best I can. For the girl who never knew how I truly felt...enough thinking of the past. Or else I'm going to go into depression. LOL! I really did like your fic. It is just sad that Harry had to die in the end. But I guess it needed to be written for sake of the story. Good job and keep it up. Good luck.

I liked very much your story, as you said: some stories demand to be written... I think is a good excuse for the story that made me cry.
Greetings from Monterrey, Nuevo León, México

I am sure that some of your other reviews will contain concern about the fact that a lot of your story included R/Hr, (something which I hate!)
It was tastefully done, but I can't get round that fact.
Although Hermione's confession at the end regarding her relationship with Ron, and the love she had for Harry, was good, I felt she only did it to take some of the guilt she felt away.
I had no feelings of sympathy for her, even though she lost her true love.
If that was your intention, then, good job.

(I still found it difficult to read, just because of the dominant R/Hr story line.)

Okay...I'm hated the premise of the story. Hermione is too smart and the loyal to Harry to date or otherwise sleep with (yuck) Ron. But you added insult to injury by writing that Harry saw them consumate their relationship, killing Harry, and having her give birth to Ron's baby.
You have written a intriguing story that held my attention long enough to keep me interest in hopes Hermione came to her senses...but like all story starting with R/Hr dating...it was very disappointing that Harry suffered in you story like he did. May be you should submit the story to a R/Hr website...it is well written...but well

I'm Heaven, one of the admins on your site. When I saw your summary I took a look at your story- because I'm sure you read the rules of this site before posting any of your work.

Personally, the R/Hr was okay as far as it goes. You were right, Hermione's feelings for Harry overshadowed the relationship. Just... be VERY careful about writing sex scenes between R/Hr. We don't allow any explicit or detailed sex scenes between characters that break our 'non breaking couples' which are H/Hr and L/J.

But seeing as Hermione still loved Harry in the end, I think you're good to leave this up.

Heaven

Don't let some people's opinion deter you from writing what you want. They are just that opinions and although I don't like reading about R/Hr "interaction" I thought this was a very interesting albeit a very out of character view of Hermione. I play around alot with the idea of Harry pushing them both away to not get them hurt in some way. But I don't think it will work, Hermione will get through to him one way or another. I also don't like sad stories alot. But I know sometimes you need to get it out of your system hehe.

I just felt compelled to write this review because some of the reviews were pretty harsh and uncalled for, there isn't a warning in the summary for nothing people.

Great Story. Even though I hate the R/Hr pairing, especially when the sleep together, this is one of the stories I have read that I have enjoyed reading with that theme in it. keep up the good work.

Well, even if you seem to don't appreciate writing sad stories where Harry or Hermione dies, I can say that you handled it well.
It would have increase the sorrow of the fic if there was a enormous lecture from Harry to Hermione and Ron ... Yes, I think it would have been good.

Anyway, nice piece of work. A pleasure to read.

ps: excuse my english if I made big mistakes :l (yeah, yeah, not so bad for a French guy ... ^^)

First off you seem like an amazing writer, I’ve read most of your other fics and you have yet to write a ‘bad’ quality fic. This story was told in such a flawless and interesting way, it’s always good to see such good quality fics such as yours posted since they are sometimes rare to find.

Got to say didn’t really enjoy the contents of the fic too much but that is of no fault of yours since you clearly stated it was an angsty fic and the second I read Hermione say that she killed Harry Potter but did not cast the spell, I knew where you were heading so it was in my opinion my fault that I kept reading knowing it wouldn’t end happy, it’d have R/Hr in it and I’d most likely not like it. But as I said your writing style just pulled me in and I don’t think I could have stopped reading despite the constant sick/queasy feeling I had throughout the whole story (cant stand R/Hr centered stories). This fic just broke my heart for Harry. Poor thing died never knowing love, never had anyone love him or show him love, was alone all his life up until his death and having to endure seeing R/Hr shagging (and us having to read about it ugh) just made it all more depressing. I also felt bad for Ron, poor Ron having to hear Hermione tell Harry that she regretted being with him when he didn’t do anything wrong (which I thank you for it’s rare to find fics where Ron isn’t the bad guy). Oddly enough the only one I don’t feel sorry for was Hermione, which I’m assuming was your intention. She made her bed so she sadly has had to lay in it and she got rewarded with a son who despite who the father is, is always a wonderful and happy blessing in my opinion, and she got everything Harry never got the good fortune to experience which was being loved by someone (even if she didn’t love Ron) and have a family which Harry never had and never got.

I think it might be a good idea if you gave the heads up that it has R/Hr in the fic in order to avoid rude reviews from hard core H/Hr shippers because we all come here to avoid R/Hr fics and some might not be too happy being tricked into a heavily R/Hr centered story (made me feel ill but I wanted to give you props for your obvious amazing writing talent). I know it’s listed as H/Hr fic but in my opinion it isn’t at all and not really sure if this is going against pk rules since you had a sex scene between R/Hr and thankfully it wasn’t too graphic but if a descriptive kiss between non pk supported couples are not allowed I don’t think a whole paragraph about R/Hr having sex is ok and I think R/Hr dating stories are allowed as long as H/Hr end up together which they didn’t.. If I had to categorize this I would say it was a bittersweet R/Hr story, I know Hermione regrets what happened and she said in every other line that Harry was her true love but action speaks louder than words in my opinion and this was just a R/Hr story because we weren’t privy to H/Hr interaction besides that one depressing as hell scene and we had to read way too much about R/Hr being togetherm kissing, shagging, having a child together etc.

Despite that I didn’t like the storyline (sorry just cant accept reading so much about R/Hr and no H/Hr as a payoff), I just wanted to acknowledge an excellent author who composed an amazing fic that managed to make my heart break for Harry even more so than the books do.

I HOPE YOU DON'T GET ANGRY, BUT I DIDN'T LIKE THIS STOREY AT ALL. I WOULD NOT EVEN CLASSIFY IT AS A H/HR STOREY. TO ME, IT'S MORE A R/HR ONE. JUST BECAUSE HR SAYS THAT SHE LOVES HARRYAND HE SAID IT BEFORE HE DIED, THEY WERE NEVER TOGETHER AND SHE DATE RON FOR TWO YEARS SECRETLY SO HARRY WOULDN'T FIND OUT, HAD SNOGGING SESSIONS WITH RON AND EVEN SHAGGED HIM BESIDES GETTING PREGNANT AND HAVING A WEASLEY BABY. FOR WOULD HAVE HAPPENED IF HARRY HADN'T OF DIED, HR WOULD TELL HIM I LOVE YOU AND ONLY YOU BUT I DID DATE RON FOR TWO YEARS BEHIND YOUR BACK AND SHAGGED HIM AND I'M HAVING HIS BABY. JUST BECAUSE YOU GAVE THE BABY GREEN EYES DOESN'T MAKE IT A PART OF HARRY. IHAVE READ SOME OF YOUR OTHER STORIES AND HAVE LIKED THEM ALOT BUT THIS ONE MAKES ME MAD AND IN MY OPINION SHOULD NOT HAVE BEEN POSTED ON PORTKEY. SORRY IF YOU DON'T LIKE MY COMMENTS BUT I JUST HAD TO SAY THEM.

OMG~ Hermione would never turn to Ron even if Harry died in front of her, chopped up in to pieces, and burned to ashes!!!! hahaha JK JK! sorry bout that

Anyways~ I think your story did the trick, it made me feel all sorts of emotions, at first, angry and bewildered that Hermione was stupid enough to choose Ron when she loves Harry, then when their relationship grew, Hermione ignoring Harry was kind of odd, because I felt that she would care even more about Harry, the more he close himself up, the more she knew he needs her help, his safty and all with Voldemort on the loose, but I agree you wrote it that way to give the story the effect you are looking for...and the SEX?? ERGH!! that brought out my strongest emotion-disgust and depression, there is no reason for Hermione to have sex with Ron! ah~ scary, but afterward you gave me the feeling that Harry loves Hermione enough that after seeing that scene, he lost the will to live, at the same time, you are the first one to make me dislike Hermione instead of Ron, she played Ron like a toy and neglicted Harry when he needs her~ that is pretty new to me! haha

I joke, but I do like your story, it shows me a bad consequence of making the wrong choice but still has a satisfied ending, good job, keep up the good work!

I have not many words to convey how this made me feel...hate, sorrow, sympathy, anger, and depression...but don't get me wrong, i liked the story...just not the way it happened.

I hate that Hermione felt taht she had to turn to ron when Harry left them...she loved Harry, you don't go to someone else to get your mind off another person because they will be forever in your heart no matter what happens..

I feel the sorrow for Harry knowing that after he caught Ron and Hermione shagging that he didn't have the will to live after the fight with Voldemort (however if Hermione's love could have made Harry better after about a week then that would have been the best thing ever.) Not having the will to live is the saddest think on the planet and knowing that your best friend was the one to produce that feeling in you...*sobs*

I feel sorry for Hermione being with the one person she didn't love, but that is her own fault. Normally if youdon't love someone then you will not stay with them for that long. And Hermione knowing good and damn well taht she loved Harry is smart enough to end the relationship with Ron and go for Harry even if he were distancing himself from them.

I angry that Hermione ended up pregnant and that she didn't have enough sense to even cast a contraceptive charm (if there is one...lets hope for her sake there wasn't, cause I might have had to kill her for not thinking of it...brightest witch, yeah right)...and she ended up pregnant. I can't stomach the thought of her and ron having sex to begin with, that is just sickening. I also didn't like how the baby had green eyes, I kinda hoped that the Gods would have had her have an emaculate baby and have it be Harry's and all....

It really made me sad to read that after he caught them that he no longer had a reason or the will to live. If he would have survived the battle with Voldemort he could have at least fought for her. I know that it would have pissed me off to see my two best friends have sex, but at least later on in battle I would force my rage against my opponent and kick his ass and then return to fight for the one I loved...

ok enough with my ranting. I enjoyed the story! Write more, just not like that...

Jenna

PS I thought I might tell you that I cried while reading this and then a solid 15 minutes after I read it and then while writing this reply which took about 30 minutes...however I feel as though my heart has been torn into millions of peices by this at least I got to cry like I needed to today. Thanks for that..(and the story I really did like it)....n-e-ways later

Jen

I had an a part of a stroy that almost similar to your story. Here goes, it's a paragraph and its kind of vague.
"We all were so consume with our own ideals, dreams and wishes that we did not see it coming. We were selfish with our need that we falter with it. We lose something important when we know it later and regret it immediately. We do stupid things but never think about it before then acted on it. We never been able to see it, the harsher truth than the real truth. We were jsut selfish humans, undeserve selfish humans."

To begin this review, I would like to say that this is one of the few fics I have read involving the death of a main character; so few, in fact, I could could them on one hand. For that, you must be applauded. I don't usually read death fics because of the amount of sadness and the heavy feeling they leave the reader with. I understand from your author's note you must not write sad stories often. It is probably best that way. If you wrote them more often, the incredible effect you have when writing might seem to wear away.

I'm not sure what I was thinking when I clicked on this link--hoping for a good end, I supose. And while it was not the good end I was thinking of, this story did have a good ending. It ended in a manner that *ends* things for the reader. Once more, applause for that. I loved the interaction between Harry and Hermione when there finally was interaction. The poetic irony of her being pregnant with Ron's child was perfect and especially heart wrenching at that moment in the story. As was the inclusion of Harry Ronald's green eyes.

I complement you on writing a moving story. It did not cause buckets of tears on my end, but it did leave me with a heavy sort of feeling inside. Perhaps the best death stories are that way. I can only imagine how well you write other stories. I must read them for myself now. Thank you, once more, for such an emotional, but not weepy, story. If, and that is a big if, Harry were to perish in the final book, I could only hope it might happen in a manner that has love confessions such as yours.