i love this it is so coool write more storys!  |
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Wow! I've never read a fic in wich Hermion's parents are against their relationship. I liked this very much. |
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Wow, those were some tough parents! But of course she chose Harry, as it should be! Nice story, keep up the good work! |
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awww..  it's really not a bad story. some grammatical errors here and there, but i guess you've been working on it. it's totally believable though. kinda like romeo & juliet.  |
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Estrangement, and love and willful behaviour. There are some strong emotions attached to this story. Well done, this is a very good fic indeed.
Sauron of Mordor |
Author Feedback: Thank you!  |
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HHR4everSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 10/01/05
aww...cute story..is there more to it? oh well i love it! it's great. i have one question tho...
is "You should have done that." supposed to be you SHOULDN'T have done that or did i read it wrong...oh well...great story tho. i really do like it
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Author Feedback: Thanks for the point out there ^^ I didn't get it beta read, which i prolly should have. . well what can you do? I've gone back and fixed it. Thanks again! |
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MusiqueSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 10/01/05
Woah...
hold on, let me ponder the meaning of unaffected for a moment...
wh should i be when theyre judging me as though im unaffected? hmm...... but.... and... wouldnt he be....arent they judging him as affected?... how not affected?... so confused.
well, i dont understand the song, but the story was awesome! |
Author Feedback: The song is kinda an interpretation of what you want it to me. I bacically just wanted tht chorus "...What should I do/ Just lay next to you/ As though I'm unaffect..." Basically saying: Should Harry act like her parents reaction bother him or not? |
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some grammer stuff:
"...kept s quite..." dont need the s and i think you mean quiet, not quite.
"...Harry had tried to o but the..." dont need teh o.
"...see him Your..." you need a period.
"You should have done that." i think you mean "you shouldn't have done that".
"...want you to loose you parents..." change loose to lose.
the ending shows hermione is an independant woman (yay!) so thats cool
great job! |
Author Feedback: Thank you for pointing out some obvious mistakes to me.  I didn't bother to have my brother beta it ofr me since it was just something in my head that needed to get out. I've goneback and fixed it all. Thank you again! |
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Great job!! The CD is awesome, and this is one of my fave. songs. I have always planned to do a fic. useing this song. Im just glad mine was going a differnt way. Keep up the great work!! This one was relly good. |
Author Feedback: Thanks for your review and enthusiam! I'm glad that you like that song/CD. I have written a fic for almost every song on it. Though this is the first one I thought any where good enough to publish |
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shaz124Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 10/01/05
I like the story, although you would hope that it would never come to such a decision. Unfortunately, the story could go that way, quite easily in fact.
Keep writing and best regards -- Shaz |
Author Feedback: I hate that some people would make their children make that kind of desicion, but it does happen. And i agree that the story could go that way. |
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TalionUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 10/01/05
This is a really good one-shot. It's always interesting to see how Hermione's parents react to her and Harry being together. Most of the time, they are happy for them. This was different, and I liked it. |
Author Feedback: Thanks. I've noticed that many people have potrayed the Grangers as happy people who don't really understand what's happening in the wizarding world. I think that they're fairly smart and can or will figure out what kind of danger their daughters in. So this is my take on them trying to protect her. |
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Thank you for the time and effort that was put in to this story so far.This is a great story please keep it up.Also ignore any and all flames.
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Author Feedback: Thank you. And again, lucky to get no flames so far. |
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