yech...talk about some vivid details there. what a horrible way of torture...it made every part of me cringe, reading that. think about editing the grammar of the very first paragraph--it's a bit sloppy and could scare away readers who don't usually spend time reading if they aren't drawn in by the first paragraph or so. usually i'm one of those, but this time i kept reading. it really seems promising. i hope you update soon; this could be an interesting fic.
remember not to go too quickly though; the plot seems extremely complicated, especially with the "muggle-free" world mentioning and ginny's fake death.
anyways, i really look forward to the rest!
~Adrial