It's a pretty good fic, but I think you sort of overdid it with the exclamation points.

Aww! They're nwo together! So happy! Cho is just a stuck up brat! In the middle of the story, for some reson, I kept thinking about the song "Is This The End of the Line". Great story!

nice story, but pleeaaase, the overload of exclamation marks really pissed me off/.

A very and nice fic, you did it fine I like to read those sort of fast but still great stories the storie in this chapter is long but fine.

Ok, most stories that have Harry and Hermione together in the end are ok with me. And the ending was very sweet. But there were two things that rubbed me the wrong way in this story.
A) All those exclamation points! Whoa! Not everything that had one needed that much excitement. There were other grammatical errors as well, but that really stuck out!
B) The plot line was a bit unbelievable to me. I can't imagine Harry actually believing that Hermione would attack another student (even if it was Cho) And why wouldn't Hermione stick up for herself at all?
Please don't take these comment the wrong way, for a first fic, it was pretty good. Keep writing and you'll improve!

Wonderful story, except that something missing. HE should have said 'I love you', so that your story would have been perfect.
^_^

For the love of Mike, delete the exclaimation marks- then I'll be able to read it. As it is I got through the first several paragraphs and I just couldn't take it any more. Pity, really... seemed like a pretty good fic.

its a good story but you really need to get rid of all those exclamation points. it gets really really irritating to read all of them and i sorta took away from the story more than adding to it. hope you fix it. bye

Waaaaaaaaaaaaay too many exclamation marks. Not every sentence needs one to make it dramatic. You also shift tenses a lot. Just fix the grammar problems.

Hey this story is not bad. it's actually really good. though i dont relli believe that cho can be that mean, i mdan she seemed relli nice in the 3, 4 and 5 books. she was very sorry when Harry asked him to the ball so hmmmmm i dunno. anhyhow relli good story, hop u writed more soon

Signed,
Witch of the north
*Go Gryffindor!!! Lions for the Cup!!!*

Hey this story is not bad. it's actually really good. though i dont relli believe that cho can be that mean, i mdan she seemed relli nice in the 3, 4 and 5 books. she was very sorry when Harry asked him to the ball so hmmmmm i dunno. anhyhow relli good story, hop u writed more soon

Signed,
Witch of the north
*Go Gryffindor!!! Lions for the Cup!!!*

that rocked! congradulations for writing such a attention getting story! I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more

Are you Indian/Pakistani, because that story had a bit of a Bollywood feel about it (I don't mean that as an insult!)
Nice idea and plot, but the exclamation marks got a bit annoying...

That was a very interesting story, i loved it! I felt so bad for Hermione but happy for her when Harry and everyone else found out about Cho. The whole bit after the kiss, Harry's revelation, was spot on to me. Well, take care and keep up the great work!!!

So a big one chapter a very good one indeed. You are a good writher really loved you`re fic. Is this you`re first, because you can`t tell otherwise good job.