great story! I hope you'll post the next chapter soon :-)

Oooooooh very interesting! I hope to see you add more to this...perhaps a few more letters, or a meeting between HHr? That would be EXCELLENT! Very well written, can't wait for more!

Wow, awesome story so far, I can't wait to read more . Having Harry crawl into the armoir was beautifully touching.

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Have you seen the movie My Blue Heaven because they have the line about "into each life a little rain must fall"

Oh my gosh I LOVE this story. It is what I think exactly Harry is feeling after Sirius passed. Keep writing it's going to be an excellent story.

What would have made the story more enjoyable is if you didn't switch off on past and present tense. I would suggest sticking to past and getting a beta (which can you can find in the forums) so they can catch your mistakes and make it better.

And this isn't completed because of the upcoming H/Hr right? This is really good so far!

Really like that, very angsty, but please how about a sequel

This is really sad but I have to admit that these must be Harry's feelings at the moment... great work

Good story, but does this even classify itself as H/Hr? I know that wasn't meant to be the point, but you might want a few more hints of H/Hr in your stories. Still, great for your first one!

Interesting, to say the least. You definetly make good use of words throughout the piece (though you should use more contractions, we don't want people sounding like robots). The biggest suggestion I can make is don't write in the present-tense narrative style. It's not easy to read, as it's mostly used in poetry.

For example, look at the last sentence of the fic, 'Harry knew this pain would lessen someday. He just didn’t know when.' There's nothing wrong with this, except it should say 'Harry knew HIS pain would lessen someday'. When you say 'this' it implies that you, as the narrator are feeling the pain as well as he. This happens several times throughout the story, and it's the one thing that I would change.

That aside though, it's very good for a first attempt. Much better than my first attempt, anyways. I look forward to seeing future works of yours, as you definitely have potential. Good work.

-G.S.

Wow. This is an incredibly powerful beginning, and I look forward to seeing where you go with it.