That ending was very foreboding, I love the way you wrote it. I feel myself on the edge of a ledge waiting for Harry to open that parchment up and read his reaction.

Great work Ec. You did a very good job with description. Harry walking cat-like, fluidly, yet with a defeated stance was very vivid in my mind.

And it's Privet, not Private Drive. It may mean the same thing, but it's spelt differently.

Hm…a story told through Vernon’s focalization…interesting! I really like this because it makes him more real, more human.

The section about the guards and Tonks is a bit vague. I get the sense that you’re trying to create a sense of secrecy about them, but then I think it suffers from being too vague.

The ending…WOW! What could be written on it? Has Hermione been captured?

Dear Ecs,

I’m so happy to finally see you publish this. There are so many things I like about it.

First of all, what really catches my attention at the opener is the mood. I love the imagery of the leaves moving, of people moving, and they never seem to stop, as if they can’t reach their destination. I love that feeling of hanging, not being able to set foot on the solid earth beneath.

Next, your descriptions of the cat is so mysterious, and even a bit sinister, until one reads that he’s there to hold a vigil, to watch out for someone. And then we find out just exactly whom the cat is supposed to guard – Harry. Your descriptions of Harry are quite different from Rowlings, but yours gives him a more apparent character, a mood or a presence, if you will. This Harry seems to have a stronger aura.

Your description of the Dursleys is to like Rowling, well done!

So far, I really like it because of the mood you're setting. *two thumbs up!*

*blinks*
Ooohhhhh ..... very nicely done ...
You've got me now ... can't wait for the reeling in ...

Back soon with more I hope !!!

~Nat.

I love your writing style! I haven't seen one quite like it. It's very embellished and interesting to read, but still precise. It's very...detached? I guess detached works... It's detached, in that we aren't in the character's head and reading a close version of their emotions, but we're still feeling their emotions because you do such an excellent job with tone, mood, and character's thought processes. Nice job, keep it up--I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with the story.

Just to get it out of the way, I want to first say that I really, really, really like your story. I almost didnt read it, and in fact passed over it several times, but that title kept catching my eye and I decided to give it a shot. I am extremely glad that I did, because your story is one of the best that I've read so far. Your writing style is beautiful, mysterious, and incredibly intelligent. Reading about Harry's pain is almost hurting me too, and the Dursley's small gesture of the hand patched clothes signifies that I'm not the only one.
You left us with a pretty huge cliff hanger at the end though, so please update soon! I can't wait to read the rest of the story and keep up the good work!

Wow! You are a great writer and this story is great too! Hurry and update! I love it!

I am very intrested with the tone you have diligently set in your story.
You have managed to beautifully capture Harry's crushing depression without becoming bogged down with dramatics.
Please try your best to remain true to the emotionless third person view.

oh this is going to be a dark Fic but it is good so Far thank you for updating so fast

wow - a wonderful beginning to your story. You have a really nice and clean writing style that is also very descriptive. Can't wait to see what you have planned. Good job.

as soon as i saw the title, i knew that i absolutely had to read it. and it was so worth it! this story is so beautifully written and with so much insight, that for a second i had a suspicion that JKR herself is hiding under the name Ecthelion you're not her, are you?
i certainly hope that you are going to update soon, because this was such a major cliffhanger, and i can't help wondering if this was done on purpose. there is so much unresolved mystery and i do hope that you are going to clarify it all. like what does that piece of paper have to do with the war/Voldemort? and what's with Harry becoming an animagus all of a sudden? oh, and i'm glad the Dursleys finally noticed something! though if i was them, i would have taken all the threats and hints from Harry's friends and stopped treating him like a slave on a coffee plantation. poor boy! i hope you make his life happier keep up the good work!

Poor Harry is clinically depressed and those horrible people don't care/realise. Of course, they won't even see that their own son is killing himself with stupid behaviour, so I guess we can't expect them to do anything about Harry's problems.

I hope the Order does something soon--and that Hermione is the one to reach Harry.

Hmm..what is that piece of pachment about? Harry's OWLs results, but that shouldn't be related to the war?

I like how you have describe Harry's disposition, and how even a muggle bigot like Vernon is able to know that there is something wrong with the Boy-who-Lived.

Hee, can see that no matter what changes, the Dursley will never change though, thinking more for their own reputation than Harry's needs.

this Sounds intresting so Far I will look forward to an update