AidaylaSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 17/08/05
Awww that was so totally cute. The whole story was awesome. "Everything" is such an awesome song- I always pictured Harry and Hermione when I thought of it. |
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Awwww...that was so sweet and fluffy *tear*. I loved it it made me feel good. |
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*grin* That was great! Really sweet! Now, I only wish there was a sequel to this since other people finding out about their relationship is always ammusing to me. ^_^ |
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Lol. *sniffle* That was really sweet too. Though I, for some reason that escapes me, like Harry's letter more. |
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*wipes away a tear* That was really sweet.
On to the next chapter! |
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gerdieSISigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 08/09/04
I love the ending to your story...that was the sweetest first date. Mine was nothing like that, at least what I remember about it, it was quite a few years ago. Thanks for the reminder of first love...it is the best. |
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PirateSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 29/08/04
Aww that was so sweet and perfect! I think it was a bit too sappy though with Harry and Hermione's speeches about the whole everything to each other - it really sounded a bit corny and out of character, as much as I loved this fic. The letters were sweet, but again I have to mention that at their ages I doubt they would put something as deep into their letters, no matter how long they'd been planning to write them and been thinking them over, just because teenagers really don't write like that and profess their love. Then again, maybe it's just me |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 29/08/04
THE FLUFF.... I CAN'T TAKE... THE FLUFF...CHOKING ON ... FLUFF AND ... (GAG)!
JUST KIDDING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It was sweet.Is there more? |
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drama963Signed | Chapter : 3 | Date : 29/08/04
I hope you do more than just this, I want to see how Ron reacts!!! PLEASE tell me!!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE keep going!!!!!!! I REALLY like this story!!!! PLEASE keep going or even give the story to me and I could write a sequel!!!!!!! |
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x_Love_xSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 29/08/04
Hey. This chapter is really goooooo d. But sorry, I might not be reviewing that much anymore on Portkey. I'm getting quite tired of logging onto the comp every day. Since I might get a bad eye sight.  But good luck with your future chapters, you're a great author. I'll review once in a while though. Cya, Love Cordelia xox xox |
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SalzySigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 29/08/04
Well, I've reviewed the other two chapters, and since you went through the effort to write this, I'm going to take alittle bit of time to review 
Good ending. Again, I still liked the first chapter the best. I may have to listen to the song again, because its been awhile since I've listened to it.
I have one minor piece of critisim. And that is the bit about Harry asking Hermione out. It seemed abit akward to me. I've been trying for the past five minutes to describe why I feel this way, but it doesn't seem to come out right. I guess it just felt alittle odd reading that he was 'asking her out'. I've always feel that love is more than that, and that after they have declared their love for each other, it would really be a given that they 'go out'. That's the best I can do to explain what I mean.
However, after thinking about it for alittle bit, I does stick with their characters and is kind of cute. It can be taken a couple of different ways. As such, it's a very minor thing that I thought I'd comment on it.
Overall, I think you did a good job with the three chapters. I'm going to see if I can get all three songs together and listen to them as I read the three chapters again.
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Author Feedback: Salzy,
First, let me thank you for actually reviewing and taking the time to make it a good one. I appreciate them all, even criticism. (But it helps when the criticism has a reason--not just "This sucked")
You probably liked the first chapter the best because it was my intention for this to be a one-shot; Harry's letter was the whole story with the assumption that since it's on Portkey that they got together. But, so many people wanted another chapter, that I extended it.
As for the awkwardness of Harry asking Hermione out, I meant for that to be there. My husband and I were best friends for 4 years when he asked me out. And that awkwardness of "where do we go from here?"  was more than prevalent. So, I hope I've explained myself well. I don't normally reply to reviews, but since you took the time you give a well-written review, I wanted to give you a (hopefully) well-written reply.
Thanks!
Starlight |
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fanUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 29/08/04
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That is so sweet! are you going to keep writing about when ron finds out and things or are you stopping? it was nicely written!!  |
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Your story is soooo cute!!! Now why cant this happen in the books!?!?!? Would make a hell of alot of us very VERY happy!! Ha Ha. Anyways, I loved your story and I think you did a great job writing it. The songs were perfect for it too!!!
Thanks, Shayna |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 28/08/04
it was good, but not really enough, u had harry and hermione acting as though they were strangers...but overall it was good! |
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Just the way I like it. Write more fics of this couple. Harry and Hermione rules!!!!! 