Hi.
I just wanted to say that when I read chapter 2, i liked it. But when I read Dome's review I do see sense in it. I haven't lost a parent, but I know that if i lost my mum( I have never met my dad) i would be really really torn up. I think you did show that. I see that maybe someone who has experianced something like this may feel that it might not have been enough. But I think that it was the right thing to kill off mrs weasley, as it would bring them together.Maybe you should have waited a few chapters for ron to realsise his feelings and ask Luna out. you could have developed thier friendship first, maybe.With harry and hermione, how would they know what has happened? unless they met ginny, how would they know??anyways, i just wanted to say that I understand it's not your best chapter ever, but it's still good. There are a lot worse chapters out there..so put your head up, this doesn't mean you're a bad writer. i'ts a brilliant quality to be able to accept critisism and inprove yourself with it. Whatever you do, don't stop writing this or any of your other fics. One not-so-good chapter doesn't make a bad story- a lot of bad chapters does.your first chapter and the majority of the second makes a brilliant impression of a great story in the making, so please continue!

great chap! i like how luna wouldn't go out with ron, even though she wanted to. it actually makes me consider saying something stupid like girl power! but killing off ms.weasly was really mean. it makes me sad

This was good!! I also liked the pairings you put up in the story! ^_^ You've gotten down Luna's and Ron's character down very well. I can't wait for the next chappie

Keep up the good work. I really like this story and since there are not that many people out there who right Ron and Luna stories this one was a delitctbal treet to read today.

killing off ron's mum was not that bad of an idea in fact I think the story is heading to have tragidy not directly relating to harry. this did nearly make me cry and that is a lot to admit for a 16 year old guy but it's the truth and i'm looking forward to the rest of this.

I like this a lot. I love Luna/Ron fics because there's something about the two of them that just... works. Anyway, I think you have a very nice premise here and your characterization of Luna is spot on. She's a difficult character to write for and probably one of the more complex characters in JKR's universe. You really captured her different layers and the way she handles herself. I can't wait for the next chapter. (Also? Killing off Mrs. Weasley? Very mean. It made me all sappy and sentimental.)

Oh that so sad! Ron and Ginny lost thier mother, I never saw that coming! I hope Ron do get Luna. I cant wait to read the next chapter! Till then read you later! !

You killed Mrs. Weasley! Yes Ron is very dense! I absolutely love this so far! Update soon!

--Jessie

......even though Ron moved on from his mother's death pretty quickly, I can see that chasing Luna will prevent him from thinking of his mother. Though, I assume Ginny, might just see it as Ron's lack of caring...I liked this chapter. Very well written and very interesting.

Of all people i could relate to, if i did some of those quizzes at those Hp.coms, Ron and i are very similar, not bs. Both of us had a crush on a girl who was a bestfriend, and we didn't notice someone has a crush on us. Damn it, i lose that someone so please help Ron get Luna because he's a bloody git.

Phoenix Firebolt

First let me tell you that I think you have true literary talent. That is obvious for anyone who read, for instance, "The Heirs of Hogwarts". I think that "Heirs..." is a very good Four Fic and that clearly shows that you have talent.

Why I am saying this? I am saying this because I don't want you to believe that I think you don't have talent, when it comes to writing.

When I read the first chapter of this fic, I got very curious, because it was an interesting challenge. In fact, it is more difficult than we may think, to write a good Ron/Luna fic, where is Ron that takes the iniative. And the reason is simple: the Canon don't give us solid clues about some romantic interest that Ron may have towards Luna. That means the authors should search in their minds and imagination for solid reasons that justify Ron's romantic interest towards Luna.

And then I read the second chapter. To be honest I was dissapointed. Very dissapointed. I think you tried to rush things too fast. I don't know if you had already, in your life, the experience of losing a parent (I sincerely hope not). When I was 18 years old, I lost my dad. It was a terrible and painful experience.

I like the first part of the dialogue between Ron and Luna. So, what is the problem? I have to tell you: after a parent dies, a person don't think about getting a girl/boy. It is the last of our concerns.

After his mother dies, Ron, at least, should have pass days in grief, sorrow, rage. He certainly would not think about dating Luna. Maybe later. And that is why I said, I think you tried to rush up things too fast.

And Ron will be looking for Harry and Hermione. Not Luna. Harry and Hermione ARE Ron's BEST FRIENDS. Not Luna.

When I finished the second chapter, I felt a profound dislike towards Ronald Weasley. He lose his mother and five minutes after he was thinking about dating a girl??

I am really sorry to write this review. I think that the reviewers must be honest. I like your way/style of writing. I said that in my reviews of "Heirs of Hgowarts". But in this case, I was dissapointed. Maybe the dissapointment is bigger because I have a great opinion of you as writer.

Please don't be angry with me. We tend to be more demanding with the writers we love most.

Sincerely

Dome 36

i think the story is great so far but i think you should consider keeping most of the story while they're at hogwarts. i mean, wouldn't it be a little weird if ron chases luna after they graduate? you would think she would have given in to him by then!

Awww ... poor Ron!

I like the story, by the way. Continue SOON!

oooh... making it a post hogwarts fic... I like that idea...

I can understand completely why you had to kill off Mrs. Weasley... Not that she is expendable or anything...

I do find it strange that Harry and Hermione did not try and comfort Ron... that seems almost out of character...

However... if they did not KNOW about Mrs. Weasley's death... then that would explain it immediately...

Another thought about that would be if they (harry and hermione) had been summoned into the Headmaster's office and were speaking with him in regards to Order business... Hense the reason that Ginny had gone down to tell Ron... Ginny in her time of grief left Ron to go be with Draco (as her comforter) thinking (or not thinking as happens when your mother dies suddenly - mine did almost 20 years ago) that Ron would seek out Harry and Hermione...

Ok enough of my babbling... I can't wait to read more of this story... post more soon!

excellent, thank you for writing a R/LL story, there arent much out there and i really like them