I really liked the story I like the Ron and Luna match. I have become used to how good the stories are. You are a fantastic writer and I like to read your stories. I look forward to your next update to this fic and can't wait for your next post for the Hiers of Hogwarts. And while I am writing I also like 50 first dates...Keep up the great work...mike

Great story loved it is there going to be more. I trully hope so..

Hi Phoenix Firebolt!

First let me congratulate you for your effort with this fic! I think you did your best.
Nevertheless, I like to give you two suggestions:

1) There are two different elements in your plot: the romance you intend to build between Ron and Luna and Ron and Ginny's grief.

These two elements can cross each other through the story but are not the same thing. The lost of a parent usually follows the well know pattern: tears, denial, acceptance. I think it will be important if you show this pattern in your story. And maybe it will be interesting to see how Luna deals with "tear Ron"; "denial Ron"; "acceptance Ron".

2) In your fic you open a very interesting possibility: the way the relationship between Ron and Ginny could be affected by this event. It will very profound if you will make an analysis of their relationship: brother/sister. A non-shipping analysis but a brotherly love analysis.

And I think that you really were able to change for the much better your fic! Good Work!

Dome

P.S. I don't understand the sudden appearance of reviews that are a copy of my first review.

Phoenix Firebolt

First let me tell you that I think you have true literary talent. That is obvious for anyone who read, for instance, "The Heirs of Hogwarts". I think that "Heirs..." is a very good Four Fic and that clearly shows that you have talent.

Why I am saying this? I am saying this because I don't want you to believe that I think you don't have talent, when it comes to writing.

When I read the first chapter of this fic, I got very curious, because it was an interesting challenge. In fact, it is more difficult than we may think, to write a good Ron/Luna fic, where is Ron that takes the iniative. And the reason is simple: the Canon don't give us solid clues about some romantic interest that Ron may have towards Luna. That means the authors should search in their minds and imagination for solid reasons that justify Ron's romantic interest towards Luna.

And then I read the second chapter. To be honest I was dissapointed. Very dissapointed. I think you tried to rush things too fast. I don't know if you had already, in your life, the experience of losing a parent (I sincerely hope not). When I was 18 years old, I lost my dad. It was a terrible and painful experience.

I like the first part of the dialogue between Ron and Luna. So, what is the problem? I have to tell you: after a parent dies, a person don't think about getting a girl/boy. It is the last of our concerns.

After his mother dies, Ron, at least, should have pass days in grief, sorrow, rage. He certainly would not think about dating Luna. Maybe later. And that is why I said, I think you tried to rush up things too fast.

And Ron will be looking for Harry and Hermione. Not Luna. Harry and Hermione ARE Ron's BEST FRIENDS. Not Luna.

When I finished the second chapter, I felt a profound dislike towards Ronald Weasley. He lose his mother and five minutes after he was thinking about dating a girl??

I am really sorry to write this review. I think that the reviewers must be honest. I like your way/style of writing. I said that in my reviews of "Heirs of Hgowarts". But in this case, I was dissapointed. Maybe the dissapointment is bigger because I have a great opinion of you as writer.

Please don't be angry with me. We tend to be more demanding with the writers we love most.

Sincerely
hzh

Phoenix Firebolt

First let me tell you that I think you have true literary talent. That is obvious for anyone who read, for instance, "The Heirs of Hogwarts". I think that "Heirs..." is a very good Four Fic and that clearly shows that you have talent.

Why I am saying this? I am saying this because I don't want you to believe that I think you don't have talent, when it comes to writing.

When I read the first chapter of this fic, I got very curious, because it was an interesting challenge. In fact, it is more difficult than we may think, to write a good Ron/Luna fic, where is Ron that takes the iniative. And the reason is simple: the Canon don't give us solid clues about some romantic interest that Ron may have towards Luna. That means the authors should search in their minds and imagination for solid reasons that justify Ron's romantic interest towards Luna.

And then I read the second chapter. To be honest I was dissapointed. Very dissapointed. I think you tried to rush things too fast. I don't know if you had already, in your life, the experience of losing a parent (I sincerely hope not). When I was 18 years old, I lost my dad. It was a terrible and painful experience.

I like the first part of the dialogue between Ron and Luna. So, what is the problem? I have to tell you: after a parent dies, a person don't think about getting a girl/boy. It is the last of our concerns.

After his mother dies, Ron, at least, should have pass days in grief, sorrow, rage. He certainly would not think about dating Luna. Maybe later. And that is why I said, I think you tried to rush up things too fast.

And Ron will be looking for Harry and Hermione. Not Luna. Harry and Hermione ARE Ron's BEST FRIENDS. Not Luna.

When I finished the second chapter, I felt a profound dislike towards Ronald Weasley. He lose his mother and five minutes after he was thinking about dating a girl??

I am really sorry to write this review. I think that the reviewers must be honest. I like your way/style of writing. I said that in my reviews of "Heirs of Hgowarts". But in this case, I was dissapointed. Maybe the dissapointment is bigger because I have a great opinion of you as writer.

Please don't be angry with me. We tend to be more demanding with the writers we love most.

Sincerely
hzh

Phoenix Firebolt

First let me tell you that I think you have true literary talent. That is obvious for anyone who read, for instance, "The Heirs of Hogwarts". I think that "Heirs..." is a very good Four Fic and that clearly shows that you have talent.

Why I am saying this? I am saying this because I don't want you to believe that I think you don't have talent, when it comes to writing.

When I read the first chapter of this fic, I got very curious, because it was an interesting challenge. In fact, it is more difficult than we may think, to write a good Ron/Luna fic, where is Ron that takes the iniative. And the reason is simple: the Canon don't give us solid clues about some romantic interest that Ron may have towards Luna. That means the authors should search in their minds and imagination for solid reasons that justify Ron's romantic interest towards Luna.

And then I read the second chapter. To be honest I was dissapointed. Very dissapointed. I think you tried to rush things too fast. I don't know if you had already, in your life, the experience of losing a parent (I sincerely hope not). When I was 18 years old, I lost my dad. It was a terrible and painful experience.

I like the first part of the dialogue between Ron and Luna. So, what is the problem? I have to tell you: after a parent dies, a person don't think about getting a girl/boy. It is the last of our concerns.

After his mother dies, Ron, at least, should have pass days in grief, sorrow, rage. He certainly would not think about dating Luna. Maybe later. And that is why I said, I think you tried to rush up things too fast.

And Ron will be looking for Harry and Hermione. Not Luna. Harry and Hermione ARE Ron's BEST FRIENDS. Not Luna.

When I finished the second chapter, I felt a profound dislike towards Ronald Weasley. He lose his mother and five minutes after he was thinking about dating a girl??

I am really sorry to write this review. I think that the reviewers must be honest. I like your way/style of writing. I said that in my reviews of "Heirs of Hgowarts". But in this case, I was dissapointed. Maybe the dissapointment is bigger because I have a great opinion of you as writer.

Please don't be angry with me. We tend to be more demanding with the writers we love most.

Sincerely
hp

i have put this up on another one of your stories which is paused due to 'Heirs'. Finish it soon because 1) i love Heirs of Hogwarts 2) you can finish this and 3) you can finish the other story!
Emily

I've just started reading this and it seems like a really cute story. I'll be keeping an eye on it. Keep up the good work!

oh well, thats what I was sort of thinking, too. I mean, I wouldn't ask somebody out after my mom dies, but I totally understand what you mean by rushing the story so you could get to the main thing, the chasing, I've done it before. And yeah, I was kinda shocked that Harry and Hermione didn't go looking for him, but I know why you did that. you did it so that when Luna comes, she will be the only one there and they can have a visit alone, but, no offense, I'm not being mean, it was a bad way of doing it. You should've said that Hermione and Harry had visitied him they had tried convoncing him to get back to the castle, but Ron wouldn't listen and Ron told them that he would stay a bit longer, and then you should've made Ron say that they left five minutes ago. that would make sense.(sorry, I'm not being mean, trying to offend you, or even saying you have to write this and taking over your book! I'm just trying to help you out! sry, it's nto supposed to be offensive!)

hey! this part is great too, skip a few years? I don't mind, because we already know that in those years Ron will be chasing Luna, trying to win her back. It's fine, just skip to the part where she finally starts liking him again! well keep up the awesome work! URGGGHHHH Ron is so stupid!

It's awesome, I love it, it's just great! I think it's a pretty cool subject, and ur one of very few that decides to show HOW they fall in love and then ALSO show what life is like AFTERWARDS well, that what ur gonna do! well, keep up the great work, I also liek authors that show HOW they fall in love and leave it there, they show a little post hogwarts, but mainly on the HOw part, I don't care if you do most post-hogwarts as long as you show how, it's fine with me!

*Sigh* okay but please up date it soon since it is pretty good to me

Hey great story! Keep writing more it's great!

I hope Ron isn't such a dick head later lol

anyways great story hun!

x0x0x0x Andrea

Okay please do not take this as an insult but you are being to hard on yourself like Dobby (no offence!) nut ya I can understand how u feel about it.so I hope you write it soon!ANd I rush the plots in my stories to I don't post them on here but I write them over and over until it goes slow.Keep up the Good Work!

This is a good story but so sad that Mrs. Weasley had to die and where are Harry and Hermione, they should be with Ron but perhaps they don't know yet.