AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 04/09/08
You keep shouting for reviews. Fine. Here is my review.
Pitiful! This story is lacking in effort, imagination, plot, sense, plausibility...The works.
Albus teaching Harry to use the Avada, let alone the group of Gryfs, is stupid beyond words. Would never happen. Ever.
Ron thinking that Dumbledore's Army would be a good name for the group to go fight in Hogsmead? Egh! That was the name for the group set up behind Umbridges back in the 5th book!
Harry being ok with all his friends wanting to go fight with him? Please! He'd try and talk them out of it. He'd fail. But he wouldn't say he was ok with it.
I really have to ask...Not that I expect a reply...But did you actually bother reading the books at all? Did you skim through them and decide to write this? Or worse, did you watch the movies?
I can't believe I bothered reading this far in. Total waste of time. I've seen better plots and storylines on the Teletubbies. |
Author Feedback: Chief, I know more about the books than just about anyone around.
You need to keep in mind a few things here:
- This was the first thing I ever wrote. OBVIOUSLY it's going to be horrible, and anyone who pays the slightest bit of attention to the information listed on my author page would realize that.
- The extremely low number of reviews for this story should've clued you in to how bad this really was.
- I don't claim for this to be any kind of good, if you want a good read, read Stone Circle.
Anyway, now that I've addressed the important points, you seem to be pretty high and mighty yourself, Mr. Anonymous. What's the matter, too afraid to leave your email address so I can make a fool of you? I would be too. Contrary to my standard policy of auto-deleting flames, I'm going to let this one stand; I constantly tell my readers that this is the single worst story I've written to date (had you read anything else I've written you would know that, but you're too smart for that, right?).
Seeing how constructive criticism seems to not be in your vocabulary, I'm just going to laugh, sigh, and brush this off as another disgruntled R/Hr shipper (and someone who has no concept of proper grammar or sentence structure, either [meaning periods aren't used to separate every single thought you have, dweeb]) taking out their own personal life problems on me.
-TGF2K |
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woah, talks about fighting with Voldy at chapter 2?  Good story I cn't wait for h/hr to get togather though keep it up   |
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woah, talks about fighting with Voldy at chapter 2? Good story I cn't wait for h/hr to get togather though keep it up |
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brittiSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 30/05/07
your story is great!i really liked this first chapter.i will finish reviewing when im fully done with the story! =) |
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a little slow, but good. like that you started out with r/ll ship. very different! |
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This chapter is...well I'm hoping the later chapters show dramatic improvment. If it wasn't for part II I woldn't keep reading.
The Unicorn |
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MollyUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 15/11/06
Very great chapter! I just can't wait to see what happens next! |
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lanzsterSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 05/11/06
Well, there were several mistakes in this chapter but there was only one BIG mistake. Harry and Ron have sepparate beds. Ron does not bunk on the bed on top of Harry coz there is no bed above Harry. I hope you correct this mistake. Anyway, its kinda good, so keep it up |
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SylverWolfUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 31/08/06
Just so you know, the note that said it wouldn't be too good, was untrue. I found it to be a great chapter and just a lil bit on the short side. keep em coming |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 04/04/06
the story is good but you need harry hermione fluff just an indication that they both like each other...because right now you cant really tell that they will end up together |
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JayUnsigned | Chapter : 5 | Date : 22/01/06
... this is terrable, i am fighting my way through it because the sequil looks like it may be good, but REALY, howofften does hermione cry in canon?! crying constantly is way ooc.
Jay |
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lanzsterSigned | Chapter : 7 | Date : 08/01/06
Really Great fic!! Even thoug Ron and Luna died you compensated it by making Ron a ghos. Great effect. Keep it up mate!!! |
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lanzsterSigned | Chapter : 4 | Date : 08/01/06
DAMN! Dude can Harry be that harsh? I mean Hermione can take care of herself, really. Anyways I'm just gonna read along and see where this ends up. By the way this fic really is starting to be great. Keep it up! |
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lanzsterSigned | Chapter : 3 | Date : 08/01/06
Great Chapter! When I read it it was just well great! As you said you really are improving as the story unravels. Keep it up mate!! |
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lanzsterSigned | Chapter : 2 | Date : 08/01/06
Well I guess what yo said was really true! You really are improving as the story develops! Well all I can say is that this is a GREAT chapter and that you did a really nice impersonation of Snivellus. And lastly NICE ending!! |
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