Ooooo, this is really good, I always think of this song as a Hermione to Harry type thingy. I loved the plot as well

I'm not really sure if there ever was a writer who was happy with what they have written. As they say, 'we are our own worst critic', or something like than.

Again, such descriptive imagery to capture the moment - wonderfully done. Brilliant allegory to Hermione's state.

Nel

I got it right away, and I think it's brilliant! I love the simplicity of this fic. The short sentences pronounce the point very well. Only four commas...nice! (I bet you could even knock those out if you tried.) I love reading fics without commas. It may sound wierd, but they feel very, I don't know, Gertrude Stein to me. This is what I want you to know -period- It makes a statement. Anway, I'm rambling. Really nice story =)

*Squee* I haven't read this one yet! Awesome, as always! Your stories are always so... so... beautiful.

Love ya!

-Nik

that helped a whole lot. i was completely lost and what i came up with was way off.

i love try by nelly furtado as well as the fic! i thought it was a really good interpretation, very good job!

"IÕm not really happy with it but oh well."

Ummm ... two things, sweet.

One, never apologize. It's your work, it's your dream, it's your own self speaking out and refusing to be silenced.

Two, who said it isn't good? The problem, too often, is that we are our worst critics; too often keeping our light under a basket simply because we always think that what we did is "not good enough" or "I'm not happy with it."

Don't ever let your doubts bring you down.

Three -- what's there to be ashamed of? As I said, it's your thoughts, your words, and there is nothing here that I see for you to be ashamed of.

There's something lyrical about the thoughts; there appears to be a rhythm that you were striving for (not having access to the music, I couldn't say ), but I think that this is a wonderful, touching piece.

Hugs,

gil

This is a good story, really. It's well written and heavily symbolic. But it is hard to follow. I'm glad you put the notes down at the bottom. From what I gather, the train symbolizes death. It that's the case, then the only thing I can't figure out is why Hermione wanted to die. Obviously Harry was alive after the final battle, so what was her decision?

So cute! Who cares if you don't get it, it's still so cute! *dances*

This is very well done. Stories like this that make you think ... these are the best ones of all. You did a very wonderful job with the symbolism - that's often hard to use. And considering how some people only delve so deep into a story, you were very brave putting this out for us to read. Great, great job. Splendid.

-Lauren