It's not bad, but there are a few canonical error, e.g. Flitick knowing Peter was the Secret Keeper changes the whole Sirius subplot, and if Voldemort was coming after all three of them like he said in the beginning then it doesn't quite make sense that he gave Lily a chance to escape.

It needs one more revision, I'd say.

Omg! I absolutely adore this story. I found it while just flipping through some pages in the author's section and read it and absolutely adored it! It is so good and love the story and plot, especially because it is so completely possible! Great job!

Caina,
Again what can I say? Great story. I do hope this story is just as good as the last. I have always been interested with Lily and James and what they did to prepare for what had happened to them. Did Lily really know what was going to happen and what is so significate with those eyes of Harry's?
I loved the way you answered these questions and I can't wait to read more from you.

God bless,
S'Eleene Paris

Wow, what a wonderful story, I was crying! I love the who concept of the love spell, the color of his eyes changing to represent her life force, smashing! This was possibly one of the best stories I have read on here, great work!

OMG. Comepletely heart wrenching! Awesome work Caina! (ANd bare inmind that I NEVER give more then one thumbup )

I have to say that I really enjoyed this story except for one part - the idea of Snape being in love with Lily is perhaps acceptable, but what was disturbing was Lily agreeing to be kissed and a long one at that - she is married and with a child. I would think that if you were going to die, you wouldnt want to committ such an act of betrayal just before. It isnt true to her character and I would have thought she had more integrity than that. Except for that, which definitely made a blip on the story, it was a good read.

that was so sad! I loved it, especially the part about snape and lily. I LOVED IT!!!!!

Caina, this is still my favorite story of yours. it's so beautiful, it doesn't matter how many times I read it, I'm still sitting here at my computer crying. You describe really well Lily's feeling of being trapped, by circumstances, by her foreknowledge, even by her love for James and Harry. When Peter agrees to be the secret keeper, we want to tell her to trust her feelings and throw him out, but we completely understand that her feelings are very confused. Your description of how she feels about the house in Godric's Hollow, that it wasn't a home, but just a place to live out the last of her life, was very poignant and sad, almost desparing.

And I was touched by the scene between Lily and Snape. I always believed Snape loved her, and she was kind to him in these last moments when it would matter the most. Even more than that, I felt Lily's heart break when James died, and her fierce determination to save her son. Love is so powerful in this story.

What an amazing, compelling story. I can't believe it only got 12 revews besides this one- people should be reading this.

Elessar

Thank you so much! When I read your summary, I couldn't resist. I've always loved Lily and herdetermination to save Harry. She is always mentioned as a brilliant witch with compassion for everyone, and she had enough love in her heart to save her son. In a way, she really did get to experience his life, as it flashed before her eyes along with her own. Also, this is Pre-OotP, but I just wanted to mention that James' eyes were hazel. Either way, it was great how Harry's eyes, being mentioned so much, are a large part of the sentimentality. You rock so much!!!

such a sad ending to the beginning of the story that changed millions

that was beautiful!!! i just happen to be reading your other stories.. this one is the best!!! the idea of harry's eyes turning green bcoz of the spell that was brilliant.. i'd never thought of that... you're amazing.. i love you!!! ~M

this was a really sad yet enjoyable story...
it was a great story, good job

This is a great story.... also a good tear jerker..... GOOD!

Nice job.

Hum.... it seems that everyone is taking on the plot line with Lily being a Seer.

oh god...that was sad...especially when she was seeing everything... excellent job...even though it's sad, i needed a good cry...great job, this is a great but sad story!

sarah may