I enjoyed the extended epilogue. A lot of authors finish the scene of Voldemorts death and then give a long chapter that only gives highlights.

awesome chapter. I liked the battle sequence. I particularily enjoyed that Voldemort had to alter Ron and Draco to be mages because they were to weak otherwise.

Nice. I like it. I was wondering where the Jedi part in the title came from. So is Lucas a squib or an un-Oblivated muggle that saw some mages duke it out and turned it into Star Wars? I was happy to finally see the two togehter. I also just realized the story summary and my guess is Ron is a mage being trained by the sorcerer. Though, Ron having enough power to be a mage seems far-fetched.

Nice so far. Ron is a mystery and I am intriged what is happening with him. Harry is defenitely thick when it comes to girls and feelings associated with them.

Nice chapter. I am predicting that Ron is be revruited to be a Death Eater unknowingly at the moment.

Nice chapters up to this point. I think the decission to hide Hermione's power from Harry will bite Albus in the butt.

An interesting start. I have enjoyed some of your other work and checking out your older stuff.

Please update this story as I love to read this one.

I liked the way Harry and Hermione were completely oblivious - which was portrayed by their inner doubts on numerous passages.

I dislike the pace you are setting, too fast with no attention to detail. Sure enough, that may be intentional but you can accomplish that with just a few more descriptive paragraphs.

On that note, the excessive use of the punctuation "..." denotes reticence, an unwillingness to share more information. Again perhaps this is intentional, but makes for a fregmented story - I am a firm believer of the leeway you must create so the reader can immerse in the story and imagine the scenes left unsaid.
However, I do believe they are being overused.

Save for these remarks, it's a nice story, congratulations on writing it.

WELL I AM HAPPY FOR HARRY AND HERMIONE .BUT THE STORY WAS TOO DIRECT. YOU WROTE 2 YEARS INCLUDING SUMMER HOLIDAYS AND CHRISTMAS HOLIDAYS IN 25 CHAPTERS. BUT SINCE ITS YOUR FIRST FANFIC YOU DID REALLY WELL. .KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

i am looking forward to reading these chapters...i promise i will review again about how it turns out

oh wow!! this was a really cool fic to read!! why does ron always have to be bad?!! its soooo sad!!!
but then i love how the story ended.

great story! the writing was a little... hmm it was like This. This. this. didnt flow as well. but seeing as this is your first peice, and since i have read some of your newer work, i can easily say that you have improved GREATLY!

the story idea was great and it was still a great read!

Maybe in the future you will go over it and make it read smoother? well thats up to you. anyways keep up the great work!

Luke

Great fan-fic and I would look forward to another one of the same.

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