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"Would YOU trust a magic wand, with the capacity to maim or kill, to someone who WASN'T mature?"
Erm...huh?
I'm a bit confused here.
Are 15 year olds around in kitchens? To cook? With sharp knives?
Any 15 year old who wants to kill someone, probably could, were the other person unaware and not in a position to defend themselves. They could kill with a knife, or while hiking with a friend they could shove the person off a cliff.
Are they allowed to? Are they normally supervised in kitchens and on cliffs? Hopefully. Probably. If they do do something, or try to, are they punished by law enforcement? Yes. If they do something on a smaller scale are they punished on one? If all goes accordingly. If you need any evidence of that, you'll see that tons of people are maimed and killed by people 15 and younger without the help of magic.
The difference between wizards and muggles is not that they are carrying a weapon, because that is not really what a wand is for.
Wands and spells are used in place of everything. Electricity and flashlights. To cure to cook to clean.
The difference is that wizards, given the desire to kill, have an additional advantage.
One 15 year old muggle wants to kill someone, whether or not they can entirely depends on the 15 year old and who they want to kill. If they want to kill a little kid, they have the advantage of the kid most likely being unaware and they have the advantage of strength. A wizard simply has another tool at their disposal. Instead of a weapon, or a skill or another person, they have magic.
Magic, or any advantage doesn't make you more mature. Situation can certainly, and going from muggle to magical could have that affect, but life and all that it entails is not different simply because there is magic. If it were, we would not be able to comprehend it. And we wouldn't write stories about it. Good stories that change something, only change one thing that fundamentally, be it setting or character or whatnot. Readers need something to relate to, and if every aspect of a story was foreign as the magic aspect is, we wouldn't relate at all.
Anyway, sorry I went off a bit. It's not about the stories or the writing or any perceived OOCness, it's just about that comment you made.
Anyway, about the story, I thought that it wasn't that they were ooc or too adult, it's that the story was stilted a bit. They can both be very adult, it was just too formal and weird and the story was more out of character than they were. They portkey to see him, the too romanticness of it, the formal dinner, the whole thing was just odd. The sentiment was nice, and I like your writing and your other stories, this one just didn't seem to click quite right.
They've never really been formal, and they were, Hermione was questioning and un-Hermione like, I dunno. I think it could be a good story, but I don't really think you'd want to go back and polish up and old story that people have liked for sometime just because some random person comes and reviews and bugs a bit.
But, if you ever want a beta (for content, oocness, or maybe just a grammar hound), drop me a line. |
your story...just had to stop by...because i wanted to add this story to my favorite list
But as a forewarning...this is the first fic that caught my eye in this website. But Kudos for posting this. Ahhh warm fuzzies.