Hmmm... interesting ending, but I think it would have been better w/o the 'six years later'.
Anyway, I've said most of what I wanted to say in my previous reviews -- bad points of this story being grammar at times, total lack of magic and strategy on aurors part at times, Hermione's defencelessness and the 'housewife' you paint her as.
I must admit, also, the placing of Fred at head of the investigation was extremely curious. Why him? He's very smart, but in reality, I think someone else would have been better suited. and where was George??
Dumbledore's addition was rather random. But I love Dumbledore =]
There was a definite lack of the other Weasleys; parents, bill, Charlie, George. One would think that when Ginny was shot, at least her parents would be there.
My favourite part of this fic, that I thought you pulled off absolutely brilliantly and amazingly, was the killer. The twists and turns, the evidence, the little, subtle hints you left, the reason behind it and Percy in his final two chapters was excellent. You portrayed his craze very well, and realistically. His thoughts were spot on, and I loved it. The back story was very clever and nicely done, and I just loved the whole thing.
You ace the mystery and killer stuff.
Anyhoo, despite all my nagging and stuff, this was a great story.
Harmony's always good, too!lol

Nice one.
xCNx

Brilliant!
Is it wrong I kind of want one of the girls to die? Just for a bit of va-voom drama, tears?lol
I think it's going to be a happy ending though
Which is not neccessarily a bad thing!
xCNx

Honestly, I don't think that was written very well. Hermione, as her character, is a very loyal, strong-willed, strong and talented woman. I don't think she would have left Harry there, but instead would have used MAGIC, perhaps? Which seems to be absent throughout the fic. Granted, the killer uses muggle weapons and that's perfectly fine, but the aurors and co. don't have to. Hermione is also a talented witch, and I don't doubt she could have stunned him or something,.
In fact, throughout the entire fic Hermione is painted as a defenceless maiden. She's an independent woman, and that's marked in her personality, and I think she wouldn't like people talking about how defencelss and weak she is all the time.
However, in regards to the killer, I think you're handling it very well. The twists and turns and suspects are brilliant. It could be either Ron or Percy now -- or Remus, but I doubt that.
I'm hoping for Percy, because I like Ron, and the evidence is pointing towards Percy.
Perhaps you're just leading us on, though.
Anyhoo, there was a lot of rushing and less detail in this chapter when the killer came. This disappointed me.
I also didn't like the way you handled Hermione.
Despite this, I'm still enjoying the fic and am looking forward to seeing who the killer is.
xCNx

Woah. Great story so far, although there are quite a few grammar mistakes. Especially with "too" and "to."
My favourite line so far =-- “For the past few months you haven’t cared. I have friends, Harry, I’ll be fine.”
“But I won’t!” he said hoarsely. “Every minute I’m afraid I’m going to hear that you were the next one. I can’t even think straight."
Brilliant! It was so emotional, and Harry was great.
What drama at the end of this chapter!! I realised something when I was reading when they were in the hospital; Percy. I shrugged off him in last chapter, thinking you were just setting up a few suspects to keep the reader guessing.
But then with Percy's questions here, his reluctance to let Aurors stay with their wives and the chanting of "Sorry, Pen" when Ginny was shot adds up. Perhaps you're throwing us off though.
Penelope used to be with Percy, and I think she was a muggle-born..
Anyway, I don't know what would motivate Percy to shoot anyone, especially his sistr, but I can't wait to find out.
... if it is him, that is.
And he was one of the only ones to know where Hermione was. Very interesting.
By all means, I hope I'm wrong, but I can't wait to see how it plays out.
Loving the HHr, too, bt I would like more of the tensions BEFORE Cho shown or explained. In a flashback or something.
But I'm aware you finished this years ago and that won't be happening!
Anyway, I'm off to read more!!
xCNx

oh how i do love this fic, it's such a fantastic piece!

no offense, but this story is soooo poorly written.. its got a great plot, but they way its written is appalling

omg this story was soo good! i cant wait to read the rest of your stories!

I love this story- could have used a bit more wrap-up, Harry and Hermione were having issues that drove him into Cho's snakey grip, and I can't believe they suspected Ron, but overall it was a wonderful story!

Why is Hermione so stupid and OOC? She refuses to listen to Harry when he denies her accusations, and doesn't bother to find out for herself whether there's any truth to what she claims. She doesn't deserve Harry if she has no trust in him.

Hermione's character is far too one-dimensional for me to stomach.

Going through old stories, here at the port, and came across this. I thought it was excellent!

I think that the mild angst, was vey well maintained throughout the story, and that it still held signs of hope, unlike so many other stories.

Great work on this story, and hopefully those to come,

Robertk

oh that was really good. I loved it. I started to put the pieces togther near the end but i did doubt it when they arrseted Ron but then I remember the killer had said I'm so sorry Pen and i just knew it was Percy. I always knew he was touched in the head. I also liked the twist in Harry and Hermione's relationship. *Hugs* swimmergirl

How did I know that? Because it was so obvious? Naw, I think it was just excellent writing

I think I may have a hunch on who the Killer is. I think it may be Percy. I mean, he was dating Penelope Clearwater, and 'Pen' may be a abbreviation or something. Just a hunch though. Brillaint story.

This story is great. I loved the suspense. I didn't even think it was Percy. I actually thought it was Fred (for some reason). Haha. Anyway, you did a great job on this. I'm definitely putting your story in my fic recs and faves list.
By the way, I loved the part wherein Harry screams that he can't let anything happen to Hermione (when they're having some Auror meeting, I think).

When the killer said "..Pen...", it made me think "Penelope" which means she probably died. Since Percy is/was married to Penelope in a large % of timelines, I'd guess thath Percy is the murderer. Although, I admit, if I didn't know about the background between Percy and Penelope, I wouldn't have a clue I think.