you expect something with a subplot to be dead set out?.. you'd have got bored if the story just went "this guy does this and because of this" instead of it being like "this guy does this because of this but while he's doing this this person is doing this which causes this to happen".. sub plots are there to confuse you and wrap you up in the story and make you wonder what's happening next.. it's called psychology my friend LoL

Does this man Linden is to give the Chrystaline Dragon to Harry? Is Harry the new Dragon Lord? Can you please explain it all? This is confusing...

It gets wierder...

Whay are they going off together if they were enemys? It makes no sence.

Not bad. A bit odd. It sort of jups round a bit, and is sort of short. Good over all, though.

SilverDagger

You don't have to worry yet.. I'm not about to end the fic in one chapter or something hehe.. there's atleast 4 more chapters left for me to write before I can even think about it ending.. there may be extra chapters to write too.. but as soon as this one has ended I intend to start work on a new one anyway.. as soon as I can figure out a new storylike that is LoL

Hmm...I'm just now starting to figure out where this is going and you're talking about ending it?

I've enjoyed what I've read so far and your concept is interesting, but I really think you need more development time. I guess the next few chapters will tell me whether I'm right or wrong though, eh?

Keep writing!

Interesting...please continue!

heh... well the lack of title was a complete accident... my mind usually ends up getting a bit hazy now and then LoL

cool. not sure what you meant by not giving this chapter a title. cool story though.

Good story, can't wait to read more.

Great story! Keep it up!!!!

Interesting, can't wait to see whats next. Keep up the good work.

this could really go some where. so far the plot is pretty good. and i'n curious about this telempathy.

Interesting start, can't wait to see more.