I really liked that story because Icould relate to it and I liked the ending.

That was truly sweet! And let's not forget the fluffiness on top!

i really like the story. i cnt believe that hermione said i love you to harry

sorry bud, I have to stop reading after the "Amorare" thing. this was really blunt, not very humanlike. I felt like everyone was replaced by androids. Cute idea, but the presentation was not so good. Keep on going though, good luck.

awesome job on this hopefully draco is in the sea thats were the ferret bolongs

“Excuse me Mr. Ron, could I speak to Miss. Granger alone for awhile?” Mr. Ron?

UM...I REALLY LYKED DIS CHAPTER. I THOUGHT U SHOULD HAB MADE IT LYKE...HERMIONE LYKING MALFOY NOT HARRY COZ I THOUGHT DAT MAYBE CHO CHANG SHOULD LYKE HARRY AND RON LYKE HERMIONE ASWELL AND MALFOY AND HIM FITE OVER HER

Nice story. What happened to Draco

Very Nice. Good detail

LOL! i REALLY HATE THAT F****** TYPO! grrrrrmmff PINK! "##¤!#%" lady! hehe, and maybe i should say that the story was written in the middle of the night after a REALLY long day, so most of the story is written with a distance from myself, quite weird actually hehe.

But all critique is welcome and i take it all in.

Alright, that was cute, but more then a bit towards the sappy side. It would have been much better and more IC if you had toned back the emotional extremes a bit - this is HP fanfiction, not some bad soap opera. These characters are in their mid-teens and are fairly normal people - they're not going to go around declaring their eternal love in sweeping terms.

Work on it a bit - I'm sure you can improve it.

Also, Pink Lady? Did you mean the Fat Lady?

Very good!!!

I like your story! Alot

This story has great potential, however just a few slight comments. you should try to develope your story more. it all went by rather quickly, even though it was not a short story. all of a sudden it was the ball, then all of a sudden it was a totally different plot. try to take things more slowly. dig inside your characters. what were they feeling? what was the setting? what did the hall look like? hermione's dress? if you worked on details you could have a very enjoyable fanfic! keep at it! you have great potential!

Wonderful story...