Great story overall. It was enjoyable to read.
I won't give you an actual review as this is an old work of yours, and you most likely have improved since then.
Instead, I have jotted down a few thoughts I had as I read, just a few things you might consider.
I fine it incredibly difficult to believe that Sirius would inform Harry of the prophesy in this manner. Harry is a thirteen—going on fourteen—year old boy, to inform him with a letter would be cruel at best. It would be extraordinarily bad judgment to inform him in this way. I doubt most adults could handle being told that perhaps the most powerful, evil, dark wizard of all time is out to kill you. If Sirius had the idea to tell Harry, I'd have to believe he’d do it in person, whenever time and circumstances allowed him to do so.
In Chapter Four Hermione told Harry: "I'm going to have to trust you not to pop in while I'm changing or something. If you do, I'll tell my dad you tried to rape me." That was astounding! Harry's reaction to that-- outrageous comment was rather pathetic, I thought. Hell, I would have given the portkey back to her right then and there. That should have been there first argument. I do believe Harry should have been highly offended by that remark. How could she possible believe him capable of such a thing. Unbelievable!
I can't possibly believe Molly would kick her own son out of the house. It is definitely not in Molly's character to do so. Not that you can't do it in your story mind you, it's just hard to swallow.
It is hard to believe that Lucius was capable of killing the Minister of Magic and two Aurors while standing in front of Albus. Albus is a very quick draw, and exceedingly experienced wizard, I doubt anyone could manage such a feat without any noticeable reaction on his part.
The Lucius/Karkaroff attack which culminated with Harry's fighting for his life against the dragons was hard to swallow. Harry and Hermione's actions early on seemed to be divorced of their brains. Why Hermione would suddenly run to Madam Maxime's aid during an attack is beyond me. And why Harry would literally do nothing to defend himself with wand in hand is also beyond me. You had done such a marvelous job describing Harry and Hermione's efforts in gaining much needed experience and skill during their many practice dueling sessions, that they seemed suddenly and utterly incompetent in a fight.
In Chapter Thirty Two you have Harry and Ron playing a chess game, in which you have Ron check Harry’s king, then Harry immediately checkmates Ron's king. The problem is, Harry can't move to checkmate Ron's king until he has secured his own king. Unless you meant to say Harry killed Ron's piece that was currently checking Harry's king, in order for Harry to move his piece into position to claim "checkmate." In that case, it should have been written as such to avoid confusion.
Otherwise, it is a technical error in the story.
The bout between Dumbledore and Harry was excellent! Thought I wish it was a little longer, it was still exciting and well worth the read.
The scene between Harry and Hermione in Harry's room, the morning after he was informed of the Horcrux within him, was sad and very touching. Well done.
The "Battle of the Ages" was everything I had always hoped and wished for in cannon that was not to be. Great battle! Very well done.
Anyway, thank you for your time and diligence in putting forth this story.
Rick
P.S. Everything I have written is my humble opinoin.
