Dream1Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 07/09/08
A lovely one shot. I see you completed most of your stories but one. Do you think you will pick up that last one and finish it? |
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love it! Your dialogue is spot on, I love 'You Harry, it's always been you'. Well duh Harry.
Really like your writing. My one observation on this story is that I don't think Hermione would just ditch Ron and go straight to Harry I think she'd ditch him first then lay low for a bit, & let him cool off before hooking up with Harry. And at least her and Harry would have the cloak... 
Thanks, I enjoy your stories |
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"My, you are dim" haha...probably my favorite quote from this fanfic. it just seems likes something hermione would say to harry during a moment like this. great job! |
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While I do like that they are together, I don't like what they did to Ron, but to each their own. |
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pstibbonsSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 24/10/06
Excellent oneshot. I enjoyed it - seemed pretty realistic. Thanks for not dragging it out into serious angst. |
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Aww, How cute! LOL, When Hermione said that neither of them would be alone, I was so hoping she would have said that Ron confessed that he was dating Luna and couldn't date Hermione. |
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Jake N.E.Signed | Chapter : 1 | Date : 22/10/06
Very good. You need to get an 'ell of a lot more stories out. I only wish i was as great a writer as you. Everything flows together great and its just great. Keep up the good work.
Sin cera, Jake N. E. |
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fanastic story, couldn't you have made it a bit longer. I would have liked to see Ron's reaction as well. |
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RiXXSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 20/10/06
A very sweet one-shot, you actually got me disliking Hermione there as well, poor Harry  Still, glad to see things worked out alright.
Great job! |
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Julie3291Unsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 18/10/06
That was a very cute little one shot. Keep up the good work. |
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AnonymousUnsigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 17/10/06
I've already read quite a few fics that bear a striking resemblance to this one and, suprisingly, I enjoyed it every bit as much as I did the first time I read one like it. To me, stories like this always nail what I think Hermione's character would act like if a situation like this were to happen.
Keep writing! |
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AmdornSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 16/10/06
Although the witty comments bandied back and forth between Harry and Hermione were fun to read. The whole story felt stilted. I didn't get a lot of emotion from the conversation. And the end came way too soon. I don't think that you should expand this type of fiction any longer than one chapter. But, a well rounded one-shot is easier to read. The beginning had quite a bit of promise. But the rest of was a let down. My only piece of advice I can give without going through line by line for you is . . . . slow down, enjoy the ride, show don't tell of the emotion.
Thanks for the read though. |
Author Feedback: Sorry you didnt enjoy this. Some people have though and I suppose you cant please everyone. |
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Sage ValeSigned | Chapter : 1 | Date : 16/10/06
Ok, so I'm cruising the updated fics page, right? And I see this 100000+ worded fic....that only had been online for a day. So, I obviously had to click on it. Then I noticed a one-shot by the same author....so, like, I clicked that one too.
I thought this was really, really, really cute, although I don't think it'll happen (well, to be honest, I don't think H/Hr will happen, but it's always nice to hope  ) as far as the going after a horcrux without Ron or Hermione. But it was still amazing! I hope The Sixth Year Mutiny is good too!
-- Sage |
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Aww that was cute!! I liked that, i mean i feel a little bad for ron, just a little, but still i like that. Its nice that they didn't sacrifice themselves for ron's feelings. Good story, well written. |
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Welcome at Portkey, "Dai Llewellyn"; I hope you find as many like-minded reviewers here as you hoped. PS: Can you tell I'm a fan of yours from ff dot net? I'm a lurker by nature but I just *had* *to* greet you ... |
Author Feedback: Ah ha, my secret is out, I see. My identity is cracked. You know, I feel like I have multiple persoanlity syndrome in this fandom. I am wizardora aka Dai llewellyn aka commonwelshgreen aka ... and I have a real name too. Its too confusing! Thank you, though, for reading me here as well as at ff net. You're too kind! |
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